Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table below shows information about the average hour spent on the internet European people of diffrent age grouops.

Overall, male who are in the growing age is the highest number spent their time on the phone and females also similar on this age both are using phone to massive on the other side that people who is compelting their age above fifty year they usage is less.

Furthermore, the age group 11-15 male using internet 8 hours and female spending their time 6 hour so internet spending time is increasing between in age 16-20 so rapidly men usage increase about 19 hour and lady usage is 18 hour.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the table’s subject and report some accurate figures, including the male and female values for ages 11–15 and 16–20. You also recognise that internet use peaks in the 16–20 group and is low among people aged over 50. However, the response covers only part of the data: it omits the 21–25, 26–30 and 31–50 groups, and gives no clear comparison of the overall pattern across all ages. The overview is difficult to interpret, and “time on the phone” is not what the table measures. At 109 words, the response is below the required 150 words, which further limits how fully you can summarise and compare the information. Include a concise overview and report the key figures across the age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic sequence: you introduce the table, give an overall statement, and then describe the first two age groups. The use of “Overall” and “Furthermore” shows an attempt to guide the reader. However, the response has little progression beyond those figures, and the overview sentence is hard to follow, so the relationship between its ideas is unclear. The final sentence combines several comparisons without a clear structure. Organise the report into an introduction, a clear overview, and one or two paragraphs grouping the age ranges; use linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, such as “average,” “age group,” “internet,” and “spending time,” and the figures help clarify parts of your meaning. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or collocations make the report difficult to understand. For example, “male who are in the growing age,” “using phone to massive,” and “compelting their age” do not express the intended comparisons clearly. “Lady” is also unsuitable for a neutral data report; use “women” or “females.” Spelling errors such as “diffrent” and “grouops” further reduce clarity. Practise precise phrases for describing data, such as “hours spent online” and “the highest figure.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and use basic structures to report figures, but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in phrases such as “male who are” and “people who is,” while “male using internet 8 hours” lacks the grammatical structure needed for a complete comparison. The sentence beginning “so internet spending time is increasing” also joins ideas in a way that makes the relationship unclear. Articles, plurals and verb forms are often missing or inaccurate, and the limited range means these problems recur. Build accurate simple sentences first—for example, “Men aged 11–15 spent an average of 8 hours online”—then combine them with carefully controlled clauses.

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