Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrate the average hours which is spent on surfing on internet by European people of different age groups.

Overall, it can be seen that male individual spend more time as compare to the female, whereas people from age 26-30 remain unchanged.

Looking at the details, the age 11-15 posses second most screenshot, whereas 21-25 stays at third largest.

Meanwhile, the age range 16-20 possess a dramaticaly rose in both gender categroies whereas the 51+ encounter the very less surfing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad subject and include an overview, noting that the 16–20 group is highest and the 51+ group lowest. However, the overview is partly inaccurate: males do not spend more time in every age group, since females record 4 hours versus males’ 3 in the 31–50 group, and both sexes record 4 hours at ages 26–30. The claim that 11–15 is “second most” is also incorrect; it is below 21–25 for both sexes. Most figures and comparisons are omitted, so the main features are only minimally reported. The response is 73 words, below the 150-word minimum; eight words copied from the prompt were not counted. Include the key figures and compare the age groups accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Looking at the details,” and “Meanwhile” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the detail paragraphs do not systematically compare the age groups or report the table’s figures, and “Meanwhile” introduces a point without a clear contrast. The short, disconnected statements also leave relationships between claims unclear. Organise the details in a consistent order—for example, describe the peak and subsequent decline, then compare male and female figures—and use linking words only where they express a genuine relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “average hours,” “age groups,” and “gender categories,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. “Second most screenshot” does not describe a table value, while “the very less surfing” is not a natural way to report the lowest figure. There are also spelling errors in “dramaticaly” and “categroies.” Use precise language for data, such as “the second-highest figure,” “recorded,” and “the lowest amount of time.” Check spelling and choose expressions that clearly describe hours spent online.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few sentence forms, including a complex overview with “whereas,” and the reader can identify the general topic. However, the range is limited, and errors in basic sentence construction and agreement occur repeatedly. For example, “The table illustrate” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “male individual spend” also needs a plural subject and matching verb. In “the age 11-15 posses,” the age group is not expressed as a complete grammatical subject. The phrase “a dramaticaly rose” also shows an incorrect grammatical form. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add comparisons using structures such as “while” and “whereas,” checking articles, plurals, and verb forms.

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