Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The following provided details information are about the aveage time spent on the internet of male and female from 11 years to above 50 years.

Overall, The given information suggests that, Adults ages spent most of there time on different socail apps. Most of peoples from 16 to 20 years spent most of there time on internet. As comapre to Female, Male are more likely in numbers. From 11 to 25 group of people are spending there most of thier time on internet.

On the other hands from 26 to above 50s there are less numbers of peoples who spend there time on internet.

By the provided given data it's show that nowadays from the start of children life are familer to internet, How to use these websites and likely internest in using internet in differnet countries of europe, So this trends also increasing in western coutries of the world.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad pattern that the 16–20 age group spends the most time online and that usage is lower among older groups. However, the response only minimally reports the table: it gives no figures and does not clearly compare male and female hours across the age bands. The claim that males are generally higher is not fully accurate, since females exceed males in the 31–50 and 51+ groups, while the 26–30 figures are equal. The comments about social apps, children becoming familiar with websites, and trends in Western countries are not shown by the data. Focus on an accurate overview and select key comparisons directly from the table.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hands.” This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the ideas do not progress clearly from an overview to specific comparisons, and the final sentence shifts to unsupported general claims rather than developing the table summary. Linking phrases such as “As comapre to” and “By the provided given data” are awkward or unclear, while several ideas are joined in long sentences. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main comparisons, and connect each point explicitly to an age group or gender.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “average time,” “internet,” “age,” and “numbers,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “spend there time” and “internet” repeated instead of more precise descriptions of the figures. Numerous spelling errors—such as “aveage,” “socail,” “comapre,” and “familer”—and inaccurate phrases such as “Adults ages spent” and “more likely in numbers” make parts difficult to understand. Choose vocabulary that describes data directly, such as “hours,” “higher,” “lower,” and “the figures are equal,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use contrast, for example, “As comapre to Female, Male are more likely in numbers.” However, sentence structures are very limited and frequent grammatical errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “The following provided details information are,” “Most of peoples … spent,” and “it's show,” which show problems with agreement, articles, plurals, and verb forms. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including the unnecessary capital in “Overall, The” and the comma on a line by itself. Build clear, accurate simple sentences first, then add a small number of controlled comparisons using “while” or “whereas.”

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