Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrates about the average hours spent on the internet by European people of the different ages, 11 to 51plus old people.

Overall, the tables also provide information about the average hours spent on the internet by European Male amd Female.

First of all, a internet use by male and female who age is 11 to 15 years old, eight hours by male and six hours by female. The young both gender whose age is 16 to 20 years old, spent the average hours on the internet 19 hours by male and 18 hours by female.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the table’s subject and reports the two highest figures accurately: males aged 11–15 average 8 hours and females 6, while the 16–20 group records 19 and 18 hours. However, it covers only these two age groups and gives no meaningful overview of the full pattern, such as the sharp peak at ages 16–20 followed by lower figures among older groups. The remaining four age categories are omitted, so the main features and comparisons are not adequately selected or reported. The response is also below the required 150 words: 23 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. To improve, describe the full age range, highlight the peak and decline, and compare male and female figures across the table.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement is followed by an overview-like sentence and then details for the first two age groups. The sequence of those figures is understandable, and “First of all” signals a move into the data. However, the overview merely repeats that the table compares males and females rather than summarising its key pattern, and the response stops before developing a complete account. The two data sentences also repeat similar structures, while the relationship between the overview and details is weak. Use a clear overview that groups the age trends, then organise the remaining comparisons into a second paragraph, using linking phrases sparingly and accurately.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough basic topic vocabulary to communicate the subject, including “average hours,” “internet,” “age,” and “gender,” and the key figures are expressed clearly. However, the range is narrow and several phrases are awkward or imprecise, such as “about the average hours,” “people of the different ages,” and “young both gender.” “The tables” is also inaccurate because the visual contains one table, and “amd” is a spelling error. These choices make the description less natural and sometimes require the reader to interpret the intended meaning. Build a small set of accurate data-reporting expressions, such as “the average time spent online,” “the 16–20 age group,” and “males and females,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a longer opening sentence and sentences describing the figures, but most structures are simple and some are incomplete or inaccurately formed. For example, “The young both gender whose age is 16 to 20 years old, spent…” has an unclear subject and an unnecessary comma separating it from the verb. “A internet use by male and female who age is 11 to 15 years old, eight hours…” is a sentence fragment rather than a complete statement. There are also article and agreement problems in “a internet” and “the tables … provide,” where the reference is to one table. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, for example, “Males aged 11–15 spent an average of eight hours online,” and vary these with accurate comparison clauses.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.