Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This table gives information about the average hours spent on the internet of European individuals of different age groups. Overall, the number of spending time on internet is much greater in the adults and is very low in old age peoples. There is some other age differences show on this table which spent their time on internet. The children who are in 11 to 15 years spent their time on internet is about 6 to 8 percent. In addition, the individuals are in between 21 to 25 years old spent their time on social media are 7 to 5 percent. Moreover, the people which are in 26 to 50 are in age use the internet just 3 to 4 percent. Consequently, the people who are 50 plus they spent their very little time on internet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the table’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that internet use peaks among younger adults and is low among older people. However, the overview is imprecise: the highest figures are specifically for ages 16–20, at 19 hours for males and 18 for females, rather than adults generally. Several details are inaccurate or unclear: the table reports hours, not percentages; the 21–25 figures are 7 and 5 hours; and the 26–50 range combines two groups with different values. You also omit the prominent peak and the male–female comparisons in most groups. The response is 124 words, below the 150-word minimum, with 11 prompt words excluded from the count. Include a clearer overview and accurate, selected comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, an overall statement, and then details about several age groups. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “Moreover” help signal movement between points. However, the ideas do not develop into a clear comparison of the table as a whole. The repeated pattern of introducing an age group and saying how much time it spends makes the report feel like a list, while the peak group is not discussed. Some references are also unclear, as in “There is some other age differences show on this table.” Organise the details into meaningful comparisons—for example, the peak and subsequent decline, then the older groups—and use linking words to show relationships rather than simply add points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “average hours,” “age groups,” “individuals,” and “internet,” and the reader can generally identify the subject of each sentence. However, vocabulary is repetitive, especially the repeated phrase “spent their time on internet,” and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural. “Social media” is not what the table measures, and “percent” mislabels the figures, which are hours. Phrases such as “number of spending time” and “old age peoples” also make the description less clear. Aim for concise, accurate reporting language and vary the wording with terms such as “hours online,” “usage,” and “the figures for.” Check that each word describes the data precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some sentence variety, including an opening description, an overview, and sentences beginning with “In addition” and “Consequently.” The basic meaning is usually recoverable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “the number of spending time on internet is” has an incorrect construction, while “There is some other age differences show” combines incompatible structures. In “The children who are in 11 to 15 years spent their time on internet is,” the clause structure and verb pattern are difficult to follow. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or awkward, as in “on internet” and “in between 21 to 25 years old.” Use simpler, complete sentence patterns first, then check subject–verb agreement and the structure of relative clauses.

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