Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table shows average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups. We can observe that people in "late-teen eras" are the ones who spent the most hours on the internet, which is understandable as this is the peak career defining time and internet has been cery important recently in education. We can see that both male and female spend about the same time on internet with the maximum derivation of only 2 hours.

We can also observe that up until the age of 30 years, the male population uses the internet either more or equal to the female population.This explains that the male population can be rather busy on the internet than the females.

The hours on the internet are sustantially decreased for the people aged 51 and more in comparition to those who are in their teens.

In conclusion, it can be said that older people tend to have lower screen-time than younger ones specially who are in the later teen stage. Also, young children from 11 and more start strong on the internet having 7 hours on average between male and female in comparirion to the 2.5 hours of someone who is aged 50+.

The hours on internet start depreciation over time after 20 years of age and after some time the internet is hardly used.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern that people aged 16–20 spend the most time online and that usage is lower among older groups. You also note that male and female figures are generally close. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: the 11–15 average is 7 hours, but the 51+ average is 2.5, and the claim that use “start[s] depreciation” after age 20 overlooks the rise from 4 to 4 hours for males and from 4 to 4 for females? More importantly, the 31–50 female figure is 4, higher than the male figure of 3. The explanation about career-defining years and the claim that older people “hardly” use the internet are unsupported. A clearer overview and accurate selection of key figures would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: an opening statement, several observations, and a concluding paragraph. Linking phrases such as “We can also observe” and “In conclusion” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is not consistently clear because the same broad idea—older people use the internet less—is repeated in the third paragraph and conclusion, while the figures are not grouped systematically by age or gender. The final paragraph also introduces the 11–15 and 51+ averages after the conclusion marker, making the ending feel like an additional point rather than a summary. Organise the body around the peak group and the subsequent age-related decline, and use precise references so each comparison follows naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “average hours,” “age groups,” “maximum,” and “substantially decreased,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and sometimes obscure the intended meaning: “late-teen eras,” “maximum derivation,” “busy on the internet,” and “start depreciation” are not suitable descriptions of the data. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “cery,” “sustantially,” “comparition,” and “comparirion.” Prefer standard data-reporting language such as “the highest figure,” “the difference,” and “declines with age.” Avoid informal or speculative expressions, and check spelling carefully to make your comparisons clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a clause beginning “as this is the peak…” and a comparison introduced by “in comparison to.” Most of the intended meaning can be followed, but errors in sentence construction and punctuation recur. For example, “both male and female spend” needs a clearer plural noun phrase, and “The hours on the internet start depreciation over time” does not form a grammatical pattern for describing a trend. There is also a missing space after the full stop in “population.This,” and the final sentence is awkwardly constructed. Use straightforward structures such as “Men spent…” and “Internet use declined after age 20,” then check agreement, articles, and punctuation in longer sentences.

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