Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given tabular chart illustrates the average hours spent on the internet by european people of different age groups.

First of all, at the age of 11-15 males spent 8 hours on mobile phones whereas female spent 6 hours on mobile phones in the same age groups. On the other hand at the age of 16-20 males spent 19 hours whereas 18 hours are spent by female, meanwhile at the age of 21-25 males spent 7 hours on mobile phones whereas female spent 5 hours on mobile phones.

At the age of 26-30 males spent 4 hours on electronics and the hours spent by female is same as that of males whereas at the age of 31-50 females spent 3 hours on mobile phones whereas female spent 4 hours on mobile phones. Whereas at the age of 51+ males spent 2 hours on mobile phones whereas female spent 3 hours on mobile phones.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the table’s subject and report several figures accurately, including the male and female totals for ages 11–15, 16–20 and 21–25. However, the response mainly lists data and does not give a clear overview of the main pattern—for example, that internet use peaks among 16–20-year-olds and generally falls in older groups. There is also a significant misreading: for ages 31–50, you say females spent 3 hours and females spent 4, rather than reporting males at 3 and females at 4. The response is 139 words, below the 150-word minimum; 14 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Add an overview and accurately summarise the key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from younger age groups to older ones, and the paragraph break gives some separation to the information. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “meanwhile” show an attempt to connect comparisons. However, the progression is mostly a list of figures rather than a clearly organised summary, and the linkers do not always express a meaningful contrast. Repeated “whereas” constructions make the writing mechanical, while the second paragraph’s repeated “at the age of” pattern does little to group related trends. Organise the data into clearer comparisons, such as the peak-use group and the older groups, and include a distinct overview to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the topic and comparisons, including “average hours,” “age groups” and “whereas.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or repetitive. “On mobile phones” and “on electronics” are not supported by the table, which reports internet hours without specifying devices; “spent online” would be more accurate. The repeated use of “spent” and “whereas” also limits variety, and “the same age groups” is awkward when referring to one group. Aim for precise chart language and vary reporting verbs and comparison phrases while avoiding details not shown in the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences to compare male and female figures, and most of the intended comparisons can be understood. However, the range is limited, with several sentences joined into long chains using “whereas” and “meanwhile,” which makes sentence boundaries and relationships less clear. There are also errors in agreement and reference: “female spent” should be “females spent” or “women spent,” and “the hours spent by female is” should be “the hours spent by females are.” In the 31–50 sentence, “females” is used twice, obscuring the intended male–female comparison. Use shorter, controlled sentences and check subject–verb agreement and plural forms.

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