Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The following table shows the number of persons with different age group spent hours on internet as we can see from the age of 11 to 15 8 males and 6 female with an average of 7 spend time on internet after coming from school or highschool depending on working on internet for your research or finding studing material or chatting on social network as at this age people play online games and chat using social media wether as from the age of 16 to 20 people used to start working while doing thier college some be using internet as thier work space like fiver used to grab customers for freelancing or for working at any reasearch proposal at this point many students who try to persue thier career in science writes research journal on different topics spending many hours on internet finding different theories that can releate thier topics from the age of 21-30 people gets really busy that from 10 people only 4 spend time on internet due to heavy working schedule to meet thier ends and from 31 to 51+ it drops lowest as people loves to spend time with thier families more than spending time on internet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies the broad pattern that internet use is highest among people aged 16–20 and falls among older groups, so it includes some relevant features. However, the summary is only partial: it does not clearly compare male and female figures across the age bands, and it misrepresents the 21–30 data by saying “from 10 people only 4 spend time on internet.” The table reports hours for separate age groups, not the number of people, and the 21–25 figures are 7 for males and 5 for females. Much of the response speculates about students, freelancing, research and family preferences, none of which is shown in the table. Focus on an accurate overview and comparisons grounded in the figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to move through the age groups in sequence, using phrases such as “from the age of 11 to 15,” “from the age of 16 to 20,” and “from 31 to 51+.” This gives the reader a loose chronological route through the information. However, the response is presented as one very long sentence, with no clear paragraphing or distinct overview. Ideas about the table are repeatedly interrupted by explanations of why people might use the internet, making the progression difficult to follow. Linking phrases such as “as we can see” and “while” do not establish clear comparisons. Separate the overview from the details, and organise the figures into concise comparisons by age and gender.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “average,” “spend time on internet,” “age,” and “working schedule,” and it attempts more specific terms such as “freelancing” and “research proposal.” However, much of the wording is repetitive or imprecise for describing a table. Phrases such as “number of persons … spent hours” and “from 10 people only 4” do not accurately express the data, while “used to start working” and “grab customers” are informal or unsuitable here. Frequent spelling errors, including “thier,” “studing,” and “reasearch,” also reduce clarity. Use precise reporting language such as “hours spent online,” “the figure,” and “compared with,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas with subordinate clauses and time expressions, for example “depending on working on internet” and “as people loves to spend time,” but the sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to control. The opening, “The following table shows the number of persons with different age group spent hours,” has unclear grammatical relationships, and the response continues as a run-on sentence with little punctuation. There are recurring problems with agreement and verb forms, as in “people gets” and “students … writes,” as well as missing or incorrect articles and prepositions. These errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Use shorter sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and punctuation.

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