Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given table illustrates information about the average hours spent on internet of european people of different age groups, lets have a look on some major features and factors about it.

Looking first at the figures of age 11-15 there are 8 males and 6 females,16-20 there are 19 males and 18 females, 21-25 there are 7 males and 5 females moreover the age group of 26-30 have cosequently same figures of 4 males and 4 females also 31-50 have 3 males and 4 females and over 51 only 2 males and 3 females.This is the total data given in the table,

comparing the most concerning factors are of the age between 11-20, in my opinion these age groups should be more corncerned about their studies and carreer rather than spending time over internet unless if it is helping them in both aspects, internet has some positive aspects moreover major negative aspects for these age groups for example i would say vulgarity and so called scrolling etc....... parents should take responsibility to prevent their childrens brain getting wired by what they see on internet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You report the table’s figures accurately, including the peak for 16–20-year-olds (19 males and 18 females) and the equal values for ages 26–30. However, the response only minimally fulfils the task because it mainly lists data and then shifts to opinions about internet use, studies, and parental responsibility. These comments are not requested and do not describe the table. There is also no clear overview identifying the main pattern: usage peaks among 16–20-year-olds and generally falls in older groups, while male figures are usually slightly higher, with two exceptions. To improve, select the most important trends, summarise them in an overview, and support that overview with a few relevant comparisons rather than adding personal advice.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some basic organisation: it introduces the table, gives figures, and then moves to a final paragraph. However, the progression is weak because the data are presented as a long sequence rather than grouped into meaningful comparisons, and the final paragraph changes to an unrelated discussion of internet risks. Linking expressions such as “Looking first,” “moreover,” and “comparing” are attempted, but some are awkward or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. The sentence beginning “Looking first at the figures” is especially crowded, with several age groups joined together. Organise the report into an introduction, a concise overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the age groups; use linking words only where they clarify those comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant terms, including “average hours,” “age groups,” and “figures,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the vocabulary is limited and several choices are inaccurate or informal for an academic table report. “Major features and factors” is vague, while “most concerning factors” introduces an opinion rather than describing data. There are also spelling errors such as “corncerned,” “carreer,” and “consequently,” and phrases such as “vulgarity and so called scrolling” are unsuitable for this task. Aim for precise reporting language, for example “the highest figure,” “declined with age,” and “the male figure exceeded the female figure.” Check spelling and avoid conversational or evaluative wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is uneven, and errors frequently make the report harder to read. For example, “the age group of 26-30 have” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “there are 8 males and 6 females,16-20 there are…” joins separate clauses without suitable punctuation. The opening also uses a comma splice in “..., lets have a look…”. Several sentences run on, particularly the final paragraph, where multiple ideas are connected without clear sentence boundaries. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences and use full stops or semicolons to separate comparisons. Also check articles, capitalisation, and agreement so that each sentence presents one clear data point or comparison.

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