Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table demonastate the information about the average hours spent on the internet by different age groups of european people

First the age 11 to 15 male 8% and the female 6% ,when increase the age 16 to 20 limite the number of the male is increase in 19% and the female decrease 18% .

In the age 21to 25 male ratio still increase 7% and female ratio 5% time to time it down , at the age of 26 to 30 boths are same ratio in 4 % , when the age go up into 31 to 50 then the male number decrease in 3% and female in 4 %

the age of boths are above then the male ratio only 2 % insted of female in 3 %

In the age of 11 to 20 the boths are going to school and collage , they nit doing any job so all male and female use internet in mostly free time . when the age increase like to 21 to50 then all free their study and go search the different job and they are not spending their free time on internet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the age groups and report several figures, including the peak for 16–20-year-olds (19 for males and 18 for females) and the lowest figures for people aged 51+ (2 and 3). However, the response does not give a clear overview of the main pattern, and some comparisons are inaccurate: for ages 21–25, the figures fall from the 16–20 peak rather than “still increase.” The table reports hours, not percentages or ratios. The final explanation about schooling, employment and free time is speculation not supported by the table, and it takes space away from describing the data. Focus on the overall peak, the general decline with age after 20, and the small gender differences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows the age groups in table order, which gives the reader a basic route through the information. You also use sequencing phrases such as “First” and “when the age increase.” However, the data description is presented in long, loosely connected sentences, with paragraph breaks that do not clearly separate an overview from detailed comparisons. Connectors such as “when” and “then” are repeated and sometimes make the relationships between figures unclear. The final explanation shifts from reporting the table to speculating about people’s lives without a clear transition. Organise the response into a short introduction and overview, followed by a paragraph comparing the age groups, and use precise links such as “by contrast” or “after this peak.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant basic terms, including “age groups,” “male,” “female,” “increase” and “decrease,” so the reader can recognise the topic and intended comparisons. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices make the data difficult to interpret. “Ratio” and “%” are not appropriate because the table gives hours, while “the age of boths” and “all free their study” are unclear expressions. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “demonastate,” “insted” and “collage.” Use a consistent set of accurate terms such as “hours,” “men,” “women,” “figure” and “spend time online.” Check spelling and choose natural collocations when describing changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine information in longer sentences, for example, “when increase the age 16 to 20…” and “when the age go up into 31 to 50…”. These attempts show an effort to describe changes across groups, but sentence structures are very limited and errors are frequent enough to obscure relationships. Problems include missing subjects and articles, incorrect verb forms and agreement (“the male number decrease”), and incomplete or poorly controlled clauses. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several comparisons joined by commas rather than separated into clear sentences. Practise accurate simple sentences first—for example, “For ages 16–20, males spend 19 hours online”—then add controlled comparisons using “while” or “whereas.”

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