Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table compares the average hours ofon staying on internet by

Eurpean people of different age groups. Overall, there are 7 different age groups from 11-15 and 51 years half of the females and large vision of males. The children of age 11-15 years, Mostly boys are staying on internet as compared to girls and the counting number of male are 8. and the females number are 6.Above teenagers, 16-20 years age group males are 19 which is not good in this age and the female numbers are also the same. they wasting most of their time on internet. From 21-25 years age group,male are 7 and females 5 which is a good for this agers. 26- 30 stand on the same number, Above 31-50 the numbers of male are 3 and female are 4 and after the age of 50 the number recored very few among 2 or 3 in males and females

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the table’s subject and report several accurate figures, including the male and female values for ages 11–15, 16–20 and 21–25. However, the overview is unclear: “large vision of males” does not communicate the main pattern, which is that internet use peaks among 16–20-year-olds and then generally declines with age. Some comparisons are also inaccurate or incomplete: for ages 16–20, the figures are 19 for males and 18 for females, not “the same,” and the 26–30 figures are both 4. The response gives little clear synthesis of the overall gender pattern. Focus on the main trends and report comparisons precisely, without adding opinions about whether internet use is “not good.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly chronological order through the age groups, so readers can locate the figures being discussed. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the opening overview is difficult to understand. Several transitions, such as “Above teenagers” and “From 21-25 years age group,” do not clearly show how one comparison relates to the next. The long, loosely connected sequence also makes the response feel repetitive rather than progressively organised. Group the overview separately, then present the age comparisons in a logical sequence, using clear links such as “By contrast” or “After this peak.” Check punctuation and spacing so that sentences and figures are easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant basic terms, including “average hours,” “age group,” “males” and “females,” which help convey the table’s subject. However, vocabulary is limited and several inaccurate or awkward expressions strain understanding. “Hours ofon staying on internet” is not a natural way to describe the measure, while “large vision of males” does not express a clear comparison. “Counting number” and “recorded very few” are also imprecise for reporting data. Spelling errors such as “Eurpean” and “recored” further reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate chart-reporting phrases, such as “spent online,” “the figure for,” and “declined to,” and use them consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report several comparisons in sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “the counting number of male are 8” has problems with sentence structure and subject–verb agreement, while “the female numbers are also the same” does not form a clear comparison. The sentence beginning “From 21-25 years age group” lacks a clear grammatical subject, and punctuation is often missing or misplaced, as in “6.Above teenagers.” Most structures are simple, with little accurate variety. Practise complete sentences using patterns such as “The figure for males was…” and “At ages 26–30, both sexes recorded…,” checking articles, agreement and sentence boundaries.

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