Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrats data on how the number of different age groups such as male and female who spending time on the Internet was changed in Europe.

overall, it can be seen that the number of age groups from 16-20 spending their time on youtube emerged significantly high both male and female.whereas, the number of older people from 51+ they used less time on youtube.

looking at the data set on more detail,both male and female from 16-20 spend their time more on youtube was

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the main peak correctly: the 16–20 group records the highest Internet use for both males and females, and you note that the 51+ group uses it least. However, the response is incomplete and addresses the table only partially. It refers to “youtube,” although the task concerns Internet use generally, and it does not report the hours or compare the other age groups—for example, the decline after ages 16–20 or the equal figures for males and females aged 26–30. The final sentence is unfinished, so there is no detailed account of the data. The response is also 85 words, below the required 150. Include a clear overview and select several accurate figures and comparisons to develop the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview beginning “overall,” and a detail paragraph beginning “looking at the data set.” This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression stops abruptly: the final paragraph ends with “was,” leaving the main detail undeveloped. The overview repeats the same peak and low-point information without moving on to other comparisons, and the link “whereas” does not lead to a complete, clearly balanced contrast. Capitalisation and spacing around sentence openings and punctuation are also inconsistent. To improve, use complete paragraphs with a clear sequence: paraphrase the table, summarise its main pattern, then compare the figures by age and sex.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “age groups,” “spending time,” and “significantly high,” and the reader can identify the broad subject. However, the range is limited, and several choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “Youtube” is not shown in the table and changes the subject from Internet use to a specific platform; “number of age groups” also does not accurately describe hours spent online. “Illustrats” is misspelled, while “emerged significantly high” is an unnatural collocation. Use precise terms such as “average hours online,” “recorded,” and “highest,” and vary the language used to compare groups. Accurate vocabulary is especially important in a data summary because imprecise wording can misrepresent what the figures measure.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence patterns, including an overview with “whereas” and a longer opening sentence. However, control is uneven, and the final sentence is incomplete: “both male and female from 16-20 spend their time more on youtube was” has no finished grammatical structure. Other examples include “who spending time,” which needs a finite verb form, and “the number of older people … they used,” where the subject is repeated and the verb pattern is faulty. Sentence openings such as “overall” also need capitalisation. Practise writing complete, direct sentences with a clear subject and verb—for example, “Males aged 16–20 spent an average of 19 hours online.” This will make comparisons easier to follow.

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