Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Today we are going to talk about how internet let us lose our time, this technology that all people use and spend a lot of time this days as we know everything work's with internet even my mom have a smart kitchen that makes dinner with internet base .

for me since covid-19 appeared people found internet unique and reaches them to the entire world news and latest informations about this epidemie.

Anyway, every generation became fan of internet so this addiction of it was for different reasons use, example the old people 50th old up addicted it for world news latest informations and communication with their families that are far from them so they just use it necessary for two hours per day somtimes three for females, 50 old down to 30 they use it for work from distance since covid was dengerous outside and too risky, the goup of teenagers are the most group that use it badly spending a lot of time more than 19 hours face to fece with their phones and and online games and that makes them in first place , then last we have between 20 and 30 this group use it for their online studies .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes a few relevant observations, including that the 16–20 group records the highest figures and that Internet use is lower among older people. However, it only minimally reports the table and often shifts into unsupported explanations about COVID-19, work, news, family communication and online games. Some figures are also misread: teenagers are said to spend “more than 19 hours,” whereas the table gives 19 hours for males and 18 for females; the 51+ group is described as using it for two to three hours, but the table shows two and three respectively without the claimed reasons. To improve, give a concise overview of the peak and general decline with age, then compare the male and female figures accurately across the age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move from general comments to age-group comparisons, using markers such as “Anyway,” “then,” and “last.” However, the response does not organise the information into a clear report: the opening discusses the writer’s views and current events, while the main paragraph mixes explanations, age categories and figures in a long, difficult-to-follow sequence. References such as “50 old down to 30” and “between 20 and 30” are unclear and do not match the table’s group boundaries. Use a short introduction, an overview, and logically grouped comparisons—for example, younger groups first and older groups second. Keep each sentence focused on the data and use linking words to show comparisons rather than adding unrelated commentary.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some vocabulary connected with the topic, including “Internet,” “generation,” “communication,” and “online studies,” and attempts phrases such as “latest information.” However, vocabulary is often basic, repetitive or inaccurately combined, which makes several points hard to understand. Examples include “internet unique,” “reaches them to the entire world news,” and “use it badly”; these do not express the intended meanings clearly or suit a formal data report. Spelling and word-form errors such as “informations,” “epidemie,” “dengerous,” and “goup” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of terms for describing the table, such as “hours spent online,” “recorded,” “higher than,” and “declined,” and avoid informal or speculative wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic time and comparison structures, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “all people use and spend a lot of time this days” has problems with agreement and time expression, while “every generation became fan” lacks an article and uses an unsuitable tense. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly the opening and the long sentence beginning “Anyway.” There are also inconsistent sentence structures and unclear age-group constructions. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add controlled comparisons such as “Males aged 16–20 spent 19 hours online, compared with 18 hours for females.”

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