Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the following table represents the average time people spend on their screens depending on their ages and sex and we can see that between the age of eleven and fifteen years old the males use screens for eight hours a day while the females use them two hours less, and between sixteen and twenty years old the number increases drastically from eight to nineteen hours a day for males and from six to eighteen hours for females , but between the ages of twenty one and twenty five tge numbers fall again to seven hours a day for males and five hours in average for females. and starting from the age of twenty six to thirty the numbers drop even more to four hours a day for each males and females and it keeps going down for males aged between thirty one and fifty to three hours a day while staying at four hours for females . and for males that are more than fifty one years it tge number decreases even more to two hours a day while females uses screens for three hours a day .and from that table we can understand that people that are between the ages of sixteen and twenty are are that most users of screens in their daily life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the figures for every age group and both sexes accurately, including the peak at ages 16–20 and the subsequent decline. The final observation that this group uses the internet most is a relevant overview, and the comparisons between males and females are generally clear. However, the response is largely a sequence of age-by-age details rather than a well-selected summary of the main features. It would be stronger with a concise overview near the beginning, highlighting the shared peak and the broad fall in usage with age, as well as the small differences between sexes. Also, the task concerns time spent on the Internet, but you repeatedly describe “screens” and “screen use,” which makes the subject less precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The information follows the age groups in the table, so the reader can generally track the comparisons. You also use linking words such as “while,” “but,” and “and” to connect male and female figures and show changes. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear separation between an overview and supporting details. Many clauses are joined by repeated “and,” “but,” and “while,” creating a mechanical, run-on progression rather than clearly grouped information. For example, the account moves directly from one age band to the next without pausing to identify the overall pattern. Organise the response into an introduction, a brief overview, and one or two detail paragraphs, and use a wider range of accurate links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the basic comparisons, and phrases such as “increases drastically,” “fall again,” and “drop even more” help describe changes. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise. “Screens” is used repeatedly even though the table measures Internet use, and “the number” does not always clearly identify whether you mean hours or users. Some word choices and forms are also inaccurate, such as “females uses” and “in average”; these reduce naturalness and belong to vocabulary control. Use precise terms such as “hours spent online,” “usage,” and “average,” and vary the language used to describe the rise, peak, and decline.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect several comparisons in complex sentences, but these structures are often difficult to control. The response contains frequent errors in agreement and sentence construction, including “females uses,” “each males and females,” and “people … are are that most users.” Several sentences run together, with inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation; for instance, the long sentence beginning “and starting from the age…” contains multiple age groups without clear sentence boundaries. These errors sometimes make the relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add a limited number of subordinate clauses. Check agreement, articles, and punctuation carefully when editing.

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