Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table gives information about the average hours spent on the Internet by European people of different age groups.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table shows information about the average hours spent on the internet by European people of different age groups. Overall, it is clear that 16 20 increase while 26 30 decreased. Moreover,male has the highest figure,whereas,female had the lowest figure. Looking at the details, 11 15 started at 8 male and female 6. It then increased gradually to 16 20 in 19 male in 18 female. Similarly, 21 25 also showed an downward trend in 7 male in 5 female in the table. On the other han,26 30 stood at 4 male 4 female the decrease in the table.it then decreased to 31 50 in 3 male 4 female and few decrease in male and female remain stable. Meanwhile, 51 are decline in the table in 2 male in e female.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the table’s subject and include several figures, including the peak for 16–20-year-olds (19 hours for males and 18 for females) and the lower values in older groups. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “16 20 increase while 26 30 decreased” describes changes, although the table compares age groups, and the claim that males have the highest figure while females have the lowest does not clearly summarise the overall pattern. Some data are misreported or difficult to interpret, especially “51 … in 2 male in e female”; the female figure is 3. The response also contains only 115 words, below the required 150, so key comparisons and an accurate overview are underdeveloped. Select the main pattern and explain it clearly before giving supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening, an overview, and a section beginning “Looking at the details.” You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Similarly,” and “Meanwhile.” However, the ideas do not progress clearly from one age group to the next, and several connections are confusing. For example, “On the other han, 26 30 stood at 4 male 4 female the decrease in the table” does not make the relationship between the figures and the claimed decrease clear. The long gaps and inconsistent punctuation also interrupt the flow. Group the age bands logically, use one sentence to report each comparison, and make links between sentences precise rather than relying on connectors alone.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is basic but includes some relevant terms, such as “average hours,” “age groups,” “highest figure,” and “downward trend.” These help communicate the topic, but the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “Increase,” “decreased,” and “decline” suggest change over time, whereas the table compares different age groups; “stood at” or “recorded” would be more suitable for reporting values. Phrases such as “few decrease” and “remain stable” are also unclear in this context. Spelling errors, including “on the other han,” further reduce precision. Build a small set of accurate comparison phrases and use them consistently to describe higher, lower, equal, and peak figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer forms, including “It then increased gradually…” and “Moreover, male has the highest figure, whereas, female had the lowest figure.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors make several statements difficult to understand. Examples include missing or unclear subjects in “16 20 increase,” incorrect tense choices such as “female had” alongside present-tense reporting, and incomplete constructions such as “in 19 male in 18 female.” Articles and number agreement are also inconsistent in “male has” and “female.” Punctuation is often missing or misplaced, particularly where separate ideas run together. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences and use a consistent present tense when describing the table.

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