Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Time is not always good for everyone. Dark time may appear in anyone's life. One proportion think or believe that its is better to stay in a bad situation when it comes without trying something to overcome it. And Some believe that it is good to improve such situations and try to overcome it. According to my opinion it is better to fight and keep pushing to improve a bad situation with full potential.

Some people think that trying something to improve a bad situation is just a waste and didn't has a logic. They may think that times will change itself even if we not give our contribution to improve that. Which is a unpleasant think for anyone one struggling with its time. They may believe that accepting such type of situation makes them strong for upcoming life disasters which is also nice way of thinking but try to find solutions and then make something bright makes a person more strong. Lets take an example of this situation where a tree is to be fall on a person and that person think no i will not move, God will save me. This isn't a strong belief but a immature mind thinking by which no one agrees.

The people which had a ability to sacrifice and start anything again from zero could say we kept on pushing hard until we saw light. Find new ways to solve problems make a person experienced and ready to fight and overcome next obstacles of their life. This thinking will make people more confident and calm even if a situation is bad because they know how to tackle it or how to give their best to change their time dark to bright.

On a conclusion both thinking exist and every one has their own way of proceeding with any kind of situation. So, working will change any thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You state a clear opinion—that people should “fight and keep pushing” to improve difficult circumstances—and you discuss both acceptance and efforts to change. The response also gives reasons, such as becoming stronger and more experienced, and includes an illustrative example. However, the discussion of accepting a bad situation is brief and partly shifts into an example about refusing to move from a falling tree, which does not closely explain acceptance of financial hardship or an unsatisfactory job. Your reasons for trying to improve circumstances are relevant but remain general, and the conclusion does not fully restate or develop your position. Explain each view more directly and support it with a realistic example tied to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “Some people think” and “The people which…” signal changes in focus. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the tree example appears abruptly, and the link between accepting hardship and becoming stronger is not fully explained. Connectors such as “but,” “because,” and “So” are used in ways that do not always show the precise relationship between ideas. The final sentence, “So, working will change any thing,” does not clearly follow from the discussion. Use clearer topic sentences, develop one point at a time, and make references and transitions more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “overcome,” “sacrifice,” “solutions,” “obstacles,” and “confident.” These choices help communicate the general argument. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, especially “bad situation,” “improve,” and “think.” Some word choices or combinations are unnatural and can make meaning less clear, such as “dark time,” “change their time dark to bright,” and “a waste and didn’t has a logic.” There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “any thing” and “immature” in a context where the intended meaning is unclear. Build a wider set of precise phrases for hardship, acceptance, and taking action, and check collocations before using them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “when,” “because,” and “even if,” so there is some variety. However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “its is better,” “times will change itself,” “if we not give our contribution,” and “a tree is to be fall.” Subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries need particular attention. Some sentences also run together or use punctuation in ways that obscure the intended structure. Practise forming accurate basic clauses first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement and verb forms; careful proofreading would improve clarity.

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