Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Majority of people accept to live in a bad situations with unsatisfactory jobs or low income bussiness. Minority humans try there best to improve the situations and work hard to get a better life.

Many people's agree to work in a odd jobs to manage their life expenses and but at some point they all are struggling with lack of money. sometimes people choose the irrelavent jobs and fileds they are not belong and try there best and work hard to coverred their house choas. In many countries people have very less options to work in realvent fields beacuse lack of experiences and sometimes cause of low confidence. For example In USA most of the people doing odd jobs like car washing, food delivery, takeaways and so on. They have a professinal degrees but these people are adjusted their lives in unsatisfactory jobs.

Some people argue with this mindset and think to get a realvent job in their study filed they belong also they work on their personalities to be able for this jobs and some humans also think like a bussiness mindset. In my opinion bussiness is the only way to escape the shortage of money because they grew slowly but in the time paased results speaks as well. For example doing a good job in your field is good but doing a bussines is helps you to grow in any field as well.

In conclusion,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views: the second paragraph describes people accepting low-paid or unsuitable work, while the third presents efforts to find relevant employment or start a business. You also give an opinion, arguing that business can help people escape financial difficulty. However, the discussion is only partial and the position is not fully clear: the opening says a minority try to improve their situation, but the conclusion is unfinished, so your final view is not brought together. Several points, such as limited job options and low confidence, are mentioned but not explained with specific reasoning. The USA example illustrates odd jobs, but does not show why people accept them or how they might improve their circumstances. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. Develop both sides and complete the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, a paragraph about accepting difficult circumstances, and another about trying to improve them. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the second paragraph moves from expenses to job choices and then to an example without clearly linking each point. Connectors such as “For example” are used, but relationships between ideas are sometimes unclear, and “and but” creates an inaccurate link. The final line, “In conclusion,” is left without a conclusion, so the essay has no completed ending. Use clearer topic sentences, link each example directly to its point, and finish by restating your view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to employment and finances, including “unsatisfactory jobs,” “lack of money,” “low confidence,” and “shortage of money.” These choices make the general topic understandable, and you attempt to express ideas about career fields and business. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “odd jobs,” “realvent job,” and “business is the only way to escape.” Frequent spelling errors—including “bussiness,” “professinal,” and “experiences”—also distract the reader. Aim for more precise phrases and check spelling carefully. For example, distinguish between “low-paid work” and “temporary work,” and use “start a business” rather than “doing a business.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including sentences with reasons and examples. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “Many people's agree to work in a odd jobs” has problems with agreement, articles, and number, while “these people are adjusted their lives” uses an incorrect verb form. In “they work on their personalities to be able for this jobs,” the sentence pattern and agreement are also unclear. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly at the start of sentences. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb forms, then build longer sentences from correctly formed clauses.

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