Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that it is best to accept a worst situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of cash. They accept the situation because they have tried hard and sometimes those hard work became useless. When it's became useless, they got exhausted. When they try for a job, sometimes they can't find the job that match with their quality. It simply exhaust them. After try again and again, they got nothing. At a result, they lose their hope.

Shortage of cash has also turn people's good time into bad times. From the very childhood we grew up to hear that 'Money is power'. You can do nothing except without money. And suddenly when it got a lack of shortage, people have nothing to do. They except that bad time.

On the otherhand, Some people believe that it is better to work and improve such moments. They thing that they are able to come from that worst situation. It is a good sign. A well know wrestler John cena said that, 'Never give up'. Its also same in ordinary peoples life. After trying sometimes, they got failed. But Consistently when they try one after one, they finally become succeed.

From my perspective, I always prefer everybody that Never loss hope. I sometimes tell my younger ones the story of the famous person named Robert Bruce. You maybe fail one time. Often 2 or 3 times. But if you try it on your best, you will gain the success. In this world, nothing you can achieve without hard work. Yet you are in difficulty you have to try your best. That's my personal opinion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a clear personal preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, supported by the advice “Never lose hope” and the Robert Bruce example. The discussion of accepting a bad situation is relevant, especially the points about repeated job-search failures and financial hardship. However, these ideas are mostly asserted rather than explained: for example, the claim that people “have nothing to do” when short of money needs a clearer explanation or a specific example. The opposing view also receives less development than your own position, and the conclusion repeats your opinion without weighing the two arguments. To strengthen the response, explain why acceptance may sometimes be reasonable and develop each example more precisely. The response meets the stated length requirement; 19 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: it introduces acceptance, presents the alternative view, and ends with your opinion. Paragraphing helps distinguish these sections, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a change in viewpoint. However, progression within paragraphs is often repetitive: several consecutive sentences describe trying, failing, and losing hope without adding a distinct step to the argument. Some links are unclear or awkward, as in “At a result,” and “And suddenly when it got a lack of shortage” makes the relationship between ideas difficult to follow. The final paragraph also repeats the message about persistence rather than drawing the discussion together. Use clearer transitions and organise each paragraph around one main claim, followed by explanation and a relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of cash,” “exhausted,” and “consistently,” so the main ideas can generally be understood. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the expression awkward or unclear. Examples include “accept a worst situation,” “a lack of shortage,” “they thing,” and “become succeed.” Repetition of “try,” “situation,” and “success” also limits flexibility. Some spelling and word-form errors, such as “otherhand” and “peoples,” further affect accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for discussing hardship and perseverance, and check whether each word fits its grammatical and contextual role. More precise vocabulary would make your arguments easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example, “When they try for a job, sometimes they can't find the job that match with their quality.” This shows an effort to express cause and time relationships, but control is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, or sentence construction. Examples include “When it's became useless,” “After try again and again,” and “they finally become succeed.” There are also problems with articles and agreement, as in “the job that match.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns, while attempts at more complex forms are often faulty. Practise accurate past-tense and present-tense forms, subject–verb agreement, and infinitive or gerund patterns after verbs such as “try.” Proofread each sentence for a complete, correctly formed clause.

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