Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, competition is very high in every field. People do a lot of struggle to earn money, find a good job and become successful in their life, but few people reach there and others get a disappointment. People think they should accept their circumstances while other believes in try again and again untill they get over from that. In this paragraph, i will explain both point of views and give my opinion in conclusion.

There are many people who do not like their jobs but they still stuck their because of some reasons. For instance, they are earning good amount of money from that job or their family pressure, their responsibilities or he is only one who earn in their family. therefore, he is unable to get out from his unsatisfied job and they always pressurize themselve to accept their situation.Moreover, some people has shortage of money and they accpet their circumstances easily instead of fighting against it because they do not have any hope inside them , they do not have opportunities or they are not looking for them and without try they just accepting that they can not do anything.

On the other hand , there are also some people who belive to try harder untill the end. they want to do their best in every situation. If they are not satisfied with their job , they start to find another job quietly who can also give them good amount of package and once they get, they quit their job which do not give them happiness. Another example, if they are shortage of money, they try to find new opportunities for themselve from which they can earn something. people who think or believe to try and improve their own situation can get easily whatever they want in their lives.

In conclusion, Although, Individuals have their own prespectives and way to see situations in life such as some easily accept whatever is happening in their liives while other always struggle to make their lives better to live. I personally go with second type of people who always try best in their lives and make their lives better in the end becuse people should always do their best and they can improve thier circumstances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve one’s circumstances. The examples about staying in a job because of family responsibilities and seeking another job or income opportunity are relevant to the question. However, the discussion is uneven: the reasons people accept a difficult situation are listed, but their perspective is not explored in much depth, while the benefits of trying to change circumstances are also asserted rather than demonstrated. The claim that people who try can “get easily whatever they want” is too broad and would be stronger if qualified and supported with a specific example. Develop the consequences and limitations of each approach, and make your position clear earlier as well as in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. This makes the main progression easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the other hand” help distinguish the contrasting arguments. The organisation is generally coherent, but some links within paragraphs are mechanical or unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves through several reasons for staying in a job and then shifts to financial hardship without clearly showing how the ideas relate. The conclusion also begins with “Although” but does not complete a contrasting clause before moving to the writer’s opinion. Use clearer topic sentences and connect examples explicitly to the point they support; vary linking expressions and check that each sentence follows logically from the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “responsibilities,” “opportunities,” “circumstances,” and “unsatisfied job.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, word-form, and spelling errors make the writing less natural and sometimes slow the reader. Examples include “do a lot of struggle,” “get over from that,” “good amount of package,” and “prespectives.” Some key terms, such as “try” and “situation,” are repeated frequently. Build a more precise range for discussing employment and financial hardship, and learn common collocations as complete phrases. Proofreading for spelling and choosing the correct form of a word will also make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional and subordinate structures, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and errors recur in sentence construction, agreement, verb forms, articles, and punctuation. For example, “other believes” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “they still stuck their” lacks the correct verb form and a clear grammatical construction. The long sentence beginning “Moreover, some people has shortage of money” contains several clauses that are not controlled consistently. Capitalisation and comma use are also unreliable, particularly at sentence beginnings and around introductory clauses. Practise building accurate complex sentences, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb, agreement, and appropriate punctuation.

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