Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued that some people belive, it is accept to bad situation and other think that better try to improve this sitution. This eassy will discuss both prespective, before i explain why i belive that better try to improve bad situation.

To begin with, One of the main reasons is that some people belive that the accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job and shortage money. Nowdays, people facing a lot of problems, and in this problem the main problem is money and job. Because, in this world money and job important is very important for human daily life. However, when people do not earn lot of money and well jobs they face a bad situation, such as they face family problems.

Furthermore, Another important reasons is that some people think that it is try to improve the bad situation. Because, bad situation is not earned successful in human life, this situation is distract in human and human who accept the bad situation they do not think how to improve this. However, some people they try to improve bad situation, because they want a good life, and they want a successful life. Therefore, they avoid the bad situation and try to improve this, because they do not accept the bad situation.

In conslusion, Although there are different opinions regarding this issue, i belive that do not accept bad situation, it is try to improve and when you improve the situation you earned a successful life. In contrast, try to improve every bad situation, and get a peaceful life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a relevant opinion: the introduction and conclusion indicate that people should try to improve difficult circumstances. You also mention both accepting and improving a bad situation, so the response addresses the central topic. However, the two views are not explained with equal clarity. The paragraph about acceptance mainly repeats that money and jobs are important and says financial difficulties can cause family problems; it does not explain why someone might choose to accept circumstances. The case for improvement is also general, with claims about achieving a good or successful life but no specific example or developed reason. Make your position explicit and support each view with a clear explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, which gives it a recognisable overall structure. Basic linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the essay. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several ideas are repeated rather than developed—for example, the second body paragraph repeatedly says that people try to improve a bad situation. Some connectors are used awkwardly or do not show a clear relationship, including “Because” at the start of sentences and “In contrast” in the conclusion. Use fewer, more precise transitions and organise each paragraph around one reason followed by its explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage,” “improve,” and “successful life,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive: “bad situation,” “people,” “job,” and “improve” recur throughout, and some word choices or combinations are unclear, such as “earned successful in human life” and “distract in human.” Spelling errors such as “belive,” “sitution,” “eassy,” and “conslusion” also make the writing less clear and polished. Build a wider range of accurate phrases for financial hardship, job dissatisfaction, and taking action, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer clauses, including sentences beginning with “Although” and “when,” but the range is limited and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors occur frequently in sentence structure and verb forms, as in “it is accept to bad situation,” “people facing a lot of problems,” and “you earned a successful life.” Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, for example “the accept a bad situation” and “Another important reasons.” Punctuation is sometimes inaccurate, including the comma after “belive” in the opening sentence and the use of “Because” as a sentence fragment. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking articles, verb forms, and punctuation.

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