Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some indiviuals opinion is that to accept the situation that are not good becuase of the money shortage or not satisfied with the job,while other beleives that its better to try the best or situation is to improve.I beleive that try for better ones and improve the problematic situations by having some skills

Some persons have lack of money that try to earn more reveue even they are not satisfied with their job.The main objective of some of the indiviuals are to get handsome amount of earning by covering their expenses and luxury like having a car,house .Suchas, in my area there is a company named as Iris marketing they offer higher salary but the employees are not satisfied.This is proven by one form filled by research student. The employess are there to covering their luxury residents.

On the other hand some persons have different propectives their opnion is make it better and try to improve the suitauation by applying skills ,as sorting matter or by giving feedback to get good experience. For example I got a job few months ago, and I had a conflict and I am not staisfied with my position , I move to another place by giving feedback to my boss to improve that thing and by using the skills like communication skills and negociation skills.I also improve the team work.

In conclusion, people should work for the money but try to improve the thing that are confusion to them and try to resolve it by using some skills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a personal position: you favour trying to improve difficult circumstances, and your final paragraph reinforces this. The job examples are relevant, particularly your account of changing jobs and giving feedback to your boss. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The first view is described mainly as wanting money for expenses and luxuries, without explaining why someone might accept an unsatisfactory job or financial hardship rather than attempt change. The Iris Marketing example is also difficult to interpret and does not clearly support the point. Your opinion that people should improve problems “by using some skills” needs clearer reasoning and a more specific explanation of what improvement involves.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the other hand” helps signal the shift between perspectives, and the personal example gives the second body paragraph a clear focus. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The first body paragraph moves from earning more to luxury purchases and then to a company example without making the links explicit. Some references, such as “that thing” and “the thing that are confusion to them,” are unclear, so readers may not know exactly what is being discussed. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the claim it supports; avoid relying on broad transitions alone.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “satisfied with their job,” “feedback,” “communication skills,” and “negotiation skills.” These choices show an effort to discuss employment and personal improvement. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts of the response hard to understand, such as “indiviuals,” “propectives,” “suitauation,” and “residents” where the intended meaning is unclear. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “handsome amount of earning” and “covering their luxury residents.” Build accuracy with common collocations and check spelling carefully; precise, natural wording will make your ideas easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence attempts, including clauses introduced by “because” and “while,” and you try to explain cause and contrast. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and many sentences contain errors that make the relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “Some persons have lack of money that try to earn more” has an incomplete and unclear clause, while “I move to another place” shifts tense in a past account. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “the situation that are not good” and the opening paragraph’s run-on structure. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled subordinate clauses and consistent past or present tense.

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