Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In today's rapidly changing world, bad situation has become considerable debate. while some people argued that accept the worst situation is the best way to lead a life,such as unsatisfactory jon or lack of money, others believe that keep trying and develope such situation.This essay will discuss both perspectives before explaining why I believe that everyone should try to improve their situation.

One of the main reason why people should try to develop their situation is that when we try,we step-up one round of success.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You state a clear opinion—that everyone should try to improve their situation—and introduce both views, including examples of an unsatisfactory job and lack of money. However, the response only begins to discuss the view in favour of improvement, with the claim that trying helps people “step-up one round of success” left unexplained. The argument for accepting a bad situation is not developed, and there are no supporting reasons or relevant examples. The response is also substantially below the required length, so it cannot adequately address all parts of the task. To improve, explain why someone might accept difficult circumstances, develop your own position with specific reasoning, and support both sides with examples before concluding.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The opening gives the reader a basic direction: it introduces the two perspectives and signals that you will give your opinion. The phrase “This essay will discuss both perspectives” also provides a simple signpost. However, the response has no developed paragraph structure or clear progression beyond the introduction and one unfinished supporting point. The link between trying and “one round of success” is not explained, and the second view is not taken up in a separate section. Build a clear sequence with an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. Use linking expressions to show how each reason supports the main point, rather than relying only on a general signpost.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory,” “lack of money,” “perspectives,” and “improve their situation,” so the central subject is generally understandable. There are also attempts to express ideas beyond very basic wording. However, inaccurate word choice, word forms, and spelling reduce precision: “bad situation has become considerable debate,” “develope,” and “step-up one round of success” are unclear or unnatural. “Jon” also appears to be a spelling error for “job.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling and word forms. For example, you could describe the issue as “a subject of considerable debate” and say that effort can “bring people closer to success.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a complex opening sentence contrasting two views, and the final clause clearly communicates your position. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, including in basic sentence construction. For example, “while some people argued that accept” lacks a correctly formed verb phrase, and “One of the main reason” has a singular-plural agreement error. The opening also begins a new sentence with lowercase “while,” while punctuation spacing is inconsistent. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Practise forming clauses with a subject and correctly inflected verb, such as “Some people argue that accepting a difficult situation is best,” and check agreement, capitalisation, and sentence boundaries when proofreading.

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