Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people think that it is good to accept a bad situation such as money shortage, or the inadequate job. On the other hand some people says it is best to do something to change this situation. I will discuss the both views further in the paragraphs and later state my opinion.

On one hand, the people who believe it is good to accept your circumstances is because they think mental peace is more important. For instance, if a person is dealing with shortage of money, he should reduce his expences, so he will be free from stress. Same goes with the person who is unsatisfied with his job. He should stay postive and accept it, because if he leaves the job he will probably get in the worse condition, because of the job shortage. He should stick to his work for better metal health and accept the situation.

On the other hand, the people who argue that its better to try to improve the situation. It is because, they believes that the success lies in the movement. With continous work and efforts people can change their lives and others too. For example, the CEO of Alibaba, who was a poor guy and was rejected by many companies, but he did not give up and continue his hard work. And today, he is one of the richest man in the world.

In conclusion and in my opinion, it is better to try to change your situation instead of living in the same loophole, because accepting a bad situation can provide you the mental relaxation for short period, but it will lead you to live in generational poverty.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve one’s circumstances, especially in the conclusion. The discussion of acceptance is relevant: you explain that staying in a job or reducing expenses may protect mental well-being. The Alibaba example also supports the idea of persistence. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, the link between accepting a job and avoiding a worse situation is not explored, and the success story is a broad example rather than a detailed explanation of how people can improve their own circumstances. To strengthen the response, develop the consequences and limitations of each view and connect examples more explicitly to your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion that gives your opinion. Signposting such as “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” makes the progression easy to follow. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. The repeated use of “because” makes parts of the first body paragraph feel mechanical, while “Same goes with the person” and “the success lies in the movement” do not clearly link the ideas. The conclusion follows logically, though “generational poverty” is introduced without being developed earlier. Use a wider range of linking methods and make each sentence’s relationship to the previous point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “circumstances,” “mental peace,” “stress,” “hard work,” and “generational poverty,” and the main ideas remain understandable. There is some attempt to use less common expressions, but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “money shortage,” “the success lies in the movement,” and “living in the same loophole” do not express the intended meanings naturally. Spelling errors such as “expences,” “postive,” and “continous” also reduce control. Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, use “financial difficulties,” “success comes through persistence,” and “remain trapped in the same situation.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if he leaves the job he will probably get in the worse condition” and a contrastive conclusion beginning with “because.” These attempts help communicate your reasoning, but errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction are noticeable. For example, “some people says” should be “some people say,” “the people … is” should be “the people … are,” and “they believes” should be “they believe.” The sentence beginning “On the other hand, the people who argue…” is also incomplete as written. Work on subject–verb agreement and ensure each sentence has a complete main clause; more accurate complex sentences would improve clarity.

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