Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

life is all about movements there is bad situations as well as good situation.Accepting bad situation is a good thing if there is any jobs shortages or pecuniry problems, but making your situation better is far more good idea.In this essay i will discuss both sides and give my own opinion.

some people argue that aceepting a hard time is always a good idea because in life there are always good and bad situations.Some times there will be a phase when you will hate your job or place of work because of people there or strict timing routine or because of burden of work with least sallery, you will suffer from financial hurdels but that is fine you have to accept every situation because nowadays at the time of unemployment all over the world you have to accept an uncomfortable job with a minumum amount of salery, for example, in modern world because of war situation every where in the world there is unemployment and in the result people who get suffer for a job they accept every bad movement.

On the other hand doing struggle to become in good position is a good idea then staying at a same situation your whole life.If a person is not satisfied with his jobs it is very hard for his to get to a beeter situation or improve him or herself. In todays world money is the basic need of all individuals and a person have to get a good job as well ass a good position in his work place.

in my opinion is strongly believe that to become a better version of your self in a best idea.It is important for a person to gat a job where he is mentally as well as emotionally satisfied and earn an amount of money which is enough for persons needs..

In conclusion i would say that improving your situation is better then staying i a same situation.In comming days a world is going to high expenses category so i think getting a better job with better amount is a great idea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for improving one’s circumstances, especially in “improving your situation is better than staying in the same situation.” The discussion of accepting hardship is relevant, using job dissatisfaction, low pay and unemployment as examples. However, the reasons remain broad: the claim that people “have to accept every situation” is not balanced with circumstances in which acceptance may be sensible, and the reference to war and worldwide unemployment is asserted rather than explained. The opposing view is also developed mainly through general statements about money and getting a better job. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits and limits of each approach and support your opinion with a specific, clearly connected example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, your opinion and a conclusion. “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages, and the reader can follow your overall preference. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several points are joined into long sentences, particularly the paragraph beginning “some people argue.” Connections between claims are often repetitive or unclear, and the opinion paragraph largely repeats the introduction and conclusion rather than advancing the discussion. Use clearer topic sentences, divide long chains of ideas into separate sentences, and make each example explicitly support the point before moving to the next idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unemployment,” “financial,” “satisfied” and “position,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make the writing less precise. Examples include “pecuniry problems,” “financial hurdels,” “least sallery” and “better amount”; these expressions are difficult or unnatural in context. “Bad situation” and “good idea” are also repeated instead of using more specific language. Build a bank of accurate phrases for employment and finances, such as “financial hardship,” “low-paid job” and “improve one’s prospects,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “If a person is not satisfied with his jobs…” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, control is inconsistent: long sentences often run together, and errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb patterns can make meaning harder to follow. For example, “in my opinion is strongly believe” lacks a clear grammatical subject and verb structure, while “it is very hard for his to get to a beeter situation” contains an unclear pronoun construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, especially at sentence beginnings. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses and check each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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