Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that is best to accept bad situation like unsatisfying job or lack of money and other believes that it is best to try to enhance those kind of situation.

To begin with, accept the situation has several demerits. People will stop trying hard improve the situation. To explain it in details, in some case like love relationship people should accept the situation but to improve their life they should try hard and do not give up and look for the better opptions and try to create the way for the life to improve. For instance, if they are not staisfied with job or money they have they work hard for it like searching for the better poste jobs and improving own self to be capable that job or post. For money they can learn about investment and do investement like in stock market or in some businesses with high paying return.

On the other hand, try best to upgrade those situation has several merits. It help to improve peopmle confidence. Adding more on it, by facing those hard and difficult situations in life they can be strong from inside and will be confident too to face any difficulties and it also help to make their mind mentaly strong. Similarly, they will not be afraid to take risk. try hard to improve their conditions they will never afraid to take big challenges and to make big decsions which helps to improve their conditions.

To conclude, accepting the bad situations may be good in relationship but not in the race to enhance the jobs or in money but facing the conditions and working on it to upgrade these environment is way to better.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a concluding preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances. The examples about seeking a better job and learning about investment are relevant, and you also recognise that acceptance may sometimes be appropriate in relationships. However, the discussion is uneven: the case for accepting a bad situation is not clearly explained, and the relationship example shifts quickly into advice to change the situation. Your own position is clearest in the conclusion, but it would be stronger if stated directly in the introduction and maintained consistently. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific explanation of its consequences, rather than relying mainly on general claims about confidence and risk-taking.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. Paragraphs generally stay focused on their main point, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers follow the broad direction. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from relationships to jobs and investments without explaining how these examples support accepting a situation. Some linking phrases are repetitive or awkward, and ideas such as confidence, inner strength, and mental strength overlap rather than build on one another. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the point it illustrates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “investment,” “challenges,” “conditions,” and “improve,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “situation,” “improve,” and “try hard.” There are also noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems, such as “better poste jobs,” “high paying return,” “improve their conditions,” and “staisfied.” These sometimes make the intended meaning less clear or sound unnatural. Build a more precise set of expressions for employment and financial circumstances, and check spelling carefully. Prefer natural collocations such as “look for a better-paid position” and “earn a higher return on an investment.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “if” and “which,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns and in more complex attempts: “it is often argued that is best” lacks a subject after “that,” while “It help to improve” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. Other examples include “People will stop trying hard improve” and “they will never afraid,” where verb forms or required grammatical elements are missing. Articles and plurals are also unreliable, as in “accept bad situation.” These errors can make the reader pause, although the overall message remains recoverable. Practise complete clause structures, agreement, and verb patterns, then proofread each sentence for a subject and correctly formed verb.

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