Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some person believe that accepting a bad situation is best. For example, an unsatisfied jobs or lack of money. Although others argue that trying and improving such situations is better. In this essay I will be dicussing both of these views and provide my opinion on this.

Certain individuals give blame to their luck for these bad situations. They get tired of being trying and not getting desire result every time. Failure makes them demotivated and exhausted which lead them to accept their faith. For example, a student who has continously failed in specific subject, might give up after trying two or three times.

Another reason for accepting these bad situations is, lack of appreciation. If some employees trying their best to make progress in their unsatisfectory jobs and still not get enough attention and appreciation for their hardwork. That might demotivate them and make them accept the situation. Furthermore, low salary effect their well being. As a result, they unwillingly have to adopt the condition. For instance, my friend who work in a private company, his boss made him work over time and after the overtime, they neither appriciate him nor pay him. After struggling a lot and arguing with his boss, he gave up and finally accepts his faith.

On other hand, some people still believe that trying hard and working hard can change the faith. They stay motivated to improve their bad situation. However, facing hundreds of failure, they stand still and keep trying. For example, they get motivated by sucecssful person who worked hard and changed their faith.

In my opinion, I feel people should keep trying even after the failure, because dedication and stick to the aim can make a person shine.

In conclusion, some people accept bad situation because of continuous failure which make them demotivated and exshausted while other believes in trying hard again and again to improve bad situations. I think people should try until they become sucessful.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a consistent opinion: the essay explains why people may give up after repeated failure and argues that persistence can improve difficult circumstances. The examples of the student and your friend make the discussion relevant, and the conclusion reinforces your position. However, the two sides are not developed equally. The reasons for accepting a bad situation receive more explanation, while the case for trying to improve it is supported mainly by the general claim that successful people worked hard. Develop this side with a specific example and explain how effort can lead to change. Also clarify the distinction between accepting circumstances and adapting to them, so the discussion answers the question more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate discussion of reasons for acceptance and continued effort, your opinion, and a conclusion. Paragraphs generally have a central focus, and signposts such as “For example,” “Furthermore,” and “On other hand” help readers follow the discussion. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, however. The opening begins with a fragment (“For example, an unsatisfied jobs or lack of money”), and “Although others argue…” is not smoothly connected to the preceding sentence. The friend example also shifts between “my friend,” “his boss,” and “they,” making the reference less clear. Use complete sentences and clearer pronouns, and link each example explicitly to the point it illustrates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “demotivated,” “appreciation,” “well being,” and “dedication.” There are also attempts at more expressive language, such as “stand still” and “make a person shine.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the writing less natural. For example, “accept their faith” appears to mean accepting their fate, while “low salary effect their well being” uses an unsuitable verb form and phrasing. Spelling errors such as “dicussing,” “continously,” and “sucecssful” are noticeable. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common word partnerships, especially for discussing failure, employment, and financial hardship.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional example (“If some employees…”) and a contrast introduced by “Although.” The main ideas are usually understandable, but errors in sentence construction, agreement, and verb forms recur. For instance, “Some person believe” needs a plural subject or singular agreement, and “which lead them” should agree with the preceding idea. “A student … might give up” is a sound structure, but the opening “For example, an unsatisfied jobs or lack of money” is a fragment. In “he gave up and finally accepts,” the verb forms do not match. Practise complete sentence formation, subject–verb agreement, and consistent tense, then proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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