Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is no denying the fact that failure representes a vital part in success. However, same people believe that it is better to face and accept a bad situation in contrast other argue that it is better to work on their weaknesses and try to improve it. I completly believe that we should not focus to accept a bad situation but to try to sove it and improve it.

On the one hand, there same difficult situation face people they can not sovle it or improving it so the best way is to accept it .In addition people must change their mindset about succes which is working hard not means always get better at the end because there are some bad ends . Secondly their are same situaation we can not control it , it beyond our control so if we forced our self that we came wors . For instance , students who work very hard for the exam but at the end he did not get a good score in this sitation it best to accept the sitation and move for the next than focused on the past.

On the other hand , every difficult situation have their solution but this standed on the character of the person because there are ssome people do not accept failure but they dont accpet to stay in this situation for this they believe that worke hard can solve it and they still improving the, selff that every bad situation make them stronger twice .

In conclusion , i believe that it is best to take a steps to improving our weakness and believe in our ability to solve the bad situation .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a relevant opinion—that people should try to improve difficult circumstances—and you discuss acceptance as well as action. The example of a student who works hard but receives a disappointing exam result helps illustrate why some outcomes may need to be accepted. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the first view receives more explanation, while the case for trying to improve a situation is mostly asserted in the general claim that difficult situations have solutions. The prompt asks for both views, so explain more fully when effort can change a job or financial problem, and support this with a specific example. Your position is stated in the introduction and conclusion, but the reasoning behind it needs clearer development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: several ideas are joined together without clear links, and the second body paragraph moves from personal character to hard work and becoming stronger without explaining how these points connect. Some linking expressions are also used mechanically or inaccurately. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence. More precise referencing would also help readers identify what “it” and “this situation” refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “accept a bad situation,” “work hard,” “failure,” and “beyond our control.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to interpret, such as “representes a vital part in success,” “same difficult situation,” and “improving the, selff.” Repetition of “situation,” “accept,” and “improve” also limits precision. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases—for example, language for financial hardship, job dissatisfaction, and taking practical steps—and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting. This would make your ideas clearer and more varied.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which,” so there is some effort to vary sentence structure. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make meaning hard to follow. For example, “every difficult situation have their solution” has agreement problems, while “students who work very hard … he did not get a good score” shifts between plural and singular forms. The opening also contains an incomplete or unclear construction after “However.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement and punctuation. Greater control of these basic patterns is needed for your ideas to come through consistently.

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