Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people think that it is best to accept a bad situation rather than trying to improve the situation. I believe one should try to improve his or her situation.

People should always try to improve their situation, and should never accept bare minimum. If people start accepting every bad situation they might loose their drive. A person who accepts an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money might believe that he or she is not meant for great things, and abandon their ambitions. Without ambitions a person starts to feel worthless, and might even slip into depression. Consequently, people might think that their is no point in learning new things, making friends or taking care of themselves, as nothing will change. For instance, a college student who has accepted bad grades, might not work hard because he or she thinks it is enough, and this is all they can do.

However, always trying to get better might make people greedy. When people are always thinking about making more money or getting a better position at work, they might use unfair means to reach their goals. The pressure to earn more or to do better might cloud a person's judgement, and they might steal or sabotage others to get what they want. For instance, a person who wants more money, might start scamming people to earn more. Nevertheless, I believe that people should always try and improve their situation. as its benefits outweighs the disadvantages. Human beings can live without a goal or ambition, and if people start accepting bad situations, our development might stop. Nobody will try to reduce the travel time and become efficient. Without the drive to do better, all the inventions, and development might not have happened. On the other hand, the drawback of not accepting a bad situation and trying to do better might be manageable by strict punshiment, If people are aware that they might face serious consequences, they might stop sabotaging others.

In conclusion, people might argue that always trying to do better can make people greedy, but this drive to get better is important for human development, and the disadvantages of this can be easily manageable. Hence, I believe people should always try to get better, and should never accept a bad situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a consistent opinion: you argue that people should try to improve their circumstances, while acknowledging that ambition can lead to greed and unfair behaviour. The examples about a student accepting poor grades and someone scamming others are relevant, and the discussion of inventions helps explain why striving can benefit society. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the case for accepting a bad situation is mostly represented as a risk of greed, rather than explaining when acceptance might be sensible or necessary. Some claims, such as that people who accept difficulties may feel worthless or stop caring for themselves, are broad and need more careful support. Develop the opposing view more fully and qualify generalisations to make the discussion more balanced and convincing. (The 9 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, separate discussion of the two views, and a conclusion that restates your position. Linking expressions such as “For instance,” “However,” and “Nevertheless” help signal examples and contrasts. The progression is generally understandable, but the second body paragraph combines the opposing view, your rebuttal, and several broad claims, so its focus becomes less clear. Some connections are also abrupt: the move from personal ambition to inventions and travel efficiency would benefit from an explicit explanation of how individual effort leads to social development. Use paragraphing to separate the opposing argument from your response, and make references such as “this” and “its benefits” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary to discuss ambition and its consequences, including “unsatisfactory job,” “abandon their ambitions,” “cloud a person’s judgement,” and “sabotage others.” These choices make the main ideas clear, and you attempt some topic-appropriate expressions. However, several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, particularly repeated uses of “get better,” “bad situation,” and “more money.” There are also spelling errors, including “loose,” “punshiment,” and “judgement” (the latter is an accepted British spelling, though consistency matters). Some collocations are awkward, such as “accepting bare minimum” and “the disadvantages of this can be easily manageable.” Aim for more precise alternatives and check spelling and natural word combinations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If people start accepting every bad situation, they might lose their drive” and clauses beginning with “When” and “Consequently.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical and punctuation errors are noticeable. For example, “their is no point” should be “there is no point,” and “its benefits outweighs” has a subject–verb agreement error; write “its benefits outweigh.” The sentence beginning “Nevertheless” has an incorrect full stop before “as,” and several commas separate subjects from verbs or interrupt the sentence unnecessarily. Review agreement, there/their, and sentence boundaries, while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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