Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people argue that the best approach to overcome bad situation, such as unsatisfaction with job or having shortage of money, is to accept it, while hile others hold a view that keep trying for improvement is the possible way for such situations. I believe that whether the situation is good or bad person should keep improving for better future.

On the one hand, it is often argued by some that accepting bad situation is best. This is because some feel demotivated and may harm themselves, so accepting it can help them in moving on with conditions such as job unsatisfaction or having less money. Which may result in keep track of present. For exampl, if a person is suffering from problem of unsatisfaction with job, instead of feeling sad about it he should accept it and keep doing his job. So that he may not lose his job and can still work.

On the other hand, others oppose the view of accepting bad situation. They believe that instead of keep living in worse way, it is better to try for better future and improve their present. For instance, if a person is unhappy with their work or present way of living life, he should work hard so that he can achieve his dream job and can change his lifestyle according to his choice. Furthurmore, trying continously can sometime change failure into success because trying consistantly clear the obstacle in success

Finally in my opinion, keep trying is the best approach of achieving succes and happiness in life. As if some people having bad situations, they should try to change it because without trying it is impossible to achieve something good in life.

In conclusion, although acceptance may overcome bad situation temporarily, but it cannot solve the problems permanently. I believe that to overcome the problems one should keep try for improvement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a consistent preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances. The first body paragraph explains that acceptance may help someone avoid becoming demotivated and retain a job, while the second argues that effort can lead to a better job or lifestyle. These examples are relevant, but the discussion remains general and the reasons are only briefly developed; for example, you do not explain when accepting a situation might be wiser or what practical steps could improve it. Your conclusion restates your position, but the claim that trying is necessary for success is asserted rather than supported. Develop each side with clearer reasoning and a more specific example to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the discussion. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. The sentence beginning “Which may result in keep track of present” is a fragment, and “So that he may not lose his job” is also separated from the sentence it depends on. The final paragraph repeats the opinion already given rather than adding a final synthesis. Improve progression by connecting each explanation directly to its example and using pronouns and linking phrases with clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “demotivated,” “present way of living,” “dream job,” and “obstacle.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make the writing less natural and sometimes slow the reader. Examples include “job unsatisfaction,” “keep trying for improvement,” and “trying consistantly clear the obstacle in success.” Spelling slips such as “exampl,” “Furthurmore,” and “succes” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing employment, finances, and personal change, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer structures, including a contrast in the opening sentence and conditional examples beginning “if a person…”. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, which sometimes makes relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “Which may result in keep track of present” is an incomplete sentence, while “if some people having bad situations” lacks a finite verb. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and verb forms, as in “accepting bad situation” and “one should keep try.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check article use and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

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