Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Yes, in current time the debate on whether we should opt bad job that pays you little or trying to achieve more is a hot topic. Some believe that accepting a bad situation is a decent option while some argue that we should try more and more for better circumstances.

The people who think that adopting a bad job that pays you little is a ggod decsion are usually financialy unstable. They can not afford risk in their lives that's why they opt a safe option. For instance ,a person who do job and the only care taker of his family and there is no way of earning for his family then he can't take too many risks for growing up and improving his earnings. If he take risk , his family would definitely suffers from bad circumstances.So these are all crucial things that's why he can't try more for raising his earning .

While on the other hand , the people who argue that it is better to try and imprve your life style are usually financialy stable or strict to their aim. They think that these small job would distract them to achive what they have admire to achieve. Their point of focus would be changed . And some people think it is insulting for them .

Overall both opinion are right for different typed of people upto some limit .

But in my prospective the people should do odd jobs if decent jobs are'nt available. Because they can get experience through them and lot more to learn for social life as well. But also try hard for more so that you can get whatever you want in your life enjoy the life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a personal position: you explain why someone supporting a family may avoid risking a secure but poorly paid job, then contrast this with people who pursue greater ambitions. Your opinion is also present in the final paragraph, where you recommend taking available work while continuing to seek better opportunities. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The second view is supported mainly by claims that small jobs distract people or feel insulting, without a concrete example or explanation of how people improve their circumstances. Your conclusion also combines accepting work and striving for more without clearly weighing when each approach is preferable. Develop each side with a specific example and make your final position more decisive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. Linking expressions such as “For instance,” “While on the other hand,” and “Overall” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The second body paragraph begins with “While on the other hand,” which combines two contrasting linkers, and “Their point of focus would be changed” does not clearly show how this supports the argument. The conclusion also shifts from discussing “both opinion” to addressing the reader as “you,” weakening the progression. Use one precise transition at a time and connect each example explicitly to the point it illustrates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financially unstable,” “take risks,” “improving their earnings,” and “achieve.” These choices make the main ideas understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the writing less natural, such as “adopting a bad job,” “small job,” “strict to their aim,” and “whatever you want in your life enjoy the life.” Repeated use of “try,” “job,” and “people” also limits precision. Aim to learn common topic collocations and check spelling and word forms; for example, describe a “poorly paid job” and someone who is “committed to their goals.” This would make your arguments clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “If he take risk, his family would definitely suffers,” and a longer explanation beginning “For instance.” These attempts show an effort to express cause and consequence, but errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships harder to follow. For example, the conditional needs consistent forms (“If he takes a risk, his family may suffer”), while “a person who do job” has subject–verb agreement and article problems. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly in the long example sentence. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and conditional patterns, and divide long sentences into shorter units. This will help you use complex structures more reliably.

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