Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

"The topic illustrates it is best to accept a bad situation.Firstly,shortage of money creates bad situation.There are many other causes of unsatisfactory job.

Sometimes people do not have feeling happy of their jobs.Some people feeling frustration,anger due to not come office in time.

People feeling trying to difficulty of bad situation due to lower salary.iAnd there are many steps in which people accept a bad situation.For example:Now a days saving money is the best option.

Moreover,people feels very upset due to not having too much time or money.

There are several other reasons which affects a bad situation.High expenses of electricity,Internet connections,Chores houses also effects on life.

These are the various factors in which people wastes their money.And government also plays an important role.The goverment wants to increase pay Salary,pay allowance and reduce tax.So,a unsatisfactory job or shortage of money not effect too much on life.

On the other hand it is better to try and improve such situations.A balanced money is the best option to improved such situations.Many people spent their extra money on foods,clothes and other different items.Balanced money accepts a bad situations.

It helps in shortage of money.People do not waste their money on extra expenditure.Financial bugdets are the best examples of unsatisfactory job.The conclusion is that Saved money is the best option.In my opinon unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is not a problem.

The problem is that how to manged money in different ways.These are the best option by which people saved or spent money by their easy ways.Its a best option in bad situation."

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes an attempt to discuss accepting difficult circumstances and trying to improve them, and it gives a personal view that saving and managing money can help. However, the task asks for both views, while most of the essay focuses on money management; the reasons for accepting a bad situation and improving it are not clearly distinguished or developed. The example about saving is relevant, but claims such as “a balanced money is the best option” are not explained, and the discussion of an unsatisfactory job is very limited. The conclusion repeats the money-management point rather than clearly weighing both views. The response is also 245 words, five words below the 250-word minimum; 17 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop each side with a clear reason and a specific example, then state your position directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organisation: the opening introduces the topic, a later paragraph begins with “On the other hand,” and the final section attempts to conclude. These features help the reader recognise a change in direction. However, progression is difficult to follow because several short paragraphs repeat points about money without showing how they connect, and the first view is not clearly separated from the second. Linking words such as “Moreover” and “These are the various factors” do not always establish a clear relationship between ideas. The conclusion also introduces further points about managing money instead of bringing the discussion together. Group the ideas into a clear introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion; use references and transitions that make the relationship between each example and its main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “unsatisfactory job,” “lower salary,” “expenses,” and “tax.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the subject. However, the range is repetitive, with “money,” “bad situation,” and “best option” used frequently, and several phrases are unclear or unnatural, such as “A balanced money” and “Financial bugdets are the best examples of unsatisfactory job.” Spelling errors, including “goverment,” “opinon,” and “bugdets,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise expressions that distinguish the two views, such as financial hardship, job dissatisfaction, accepting circumstances, and taking practical steps to improve one’s situation. Check spelling and collocations, and avoid repeating the same general phrase when a more specific term is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing mainly uses simple statements, with a few attempts to connect clauses, for example, “The government wants to increase pay Salary, pay allowance and reduce tax.” This shows an effort to express more than one related idea, but sentence structures remain limited and errors occur throughout. Examples include “people do not have feeling happy,” “people feels very upset,” and “the problem is that how to manged money,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement, and clause construction. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a unsatisfactory job” and “a bad situations.” Punctuation spacing and sentence boundaries need attention as well. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add controlled complex forms using “because,” “although,” or “while.” Proofread each sentence for agreement, articles, and complete clause structure.

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