Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

People have their own opinions, either they want to accept the bad situation like unsafisfactory job or shortage of money. while some believe that it is better to try and improve such situation. This essay will discuss both veiw points and i will also share my own opinion before reaching conclusion.

Fortunately, accpet a bad thing is not mandatory alway accept according to the situation what situation is ? Like if you have a shortage of money and you can not find a job regarding your field or according to your education do what job you find for the survival of the life. You cannot always find what you want. Sometime you have to adjust according to the situation but when you find better opportunity go for that.

Moreover, if you stay in bad situation according to your choice it is not right. Like if you donot get job in your field and after some time you get opportunity to get job in your field and have better option go for that. Do not stuck on that or compromise again. Furthermore, in my opinion if you are finding a better opportunity then definitely go for that. Because that can help improve your life find you new opportunities give you mental satisfaction. Always try for better to upgrade that situation never stuck on one always find new facilities.

In conclusion, it the decision of the mens own either they want a better life or wanted to spend by the struggles they are doing , So always try to for better because it can open a lot of doors for you and can solve a lot of probelms that you are facing so always go for better.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear preference for trying to improve a difficult situation, especially in “always try for better,” and you include examples involving a shortage of money and finding work outside one’s field. However, the discussion of accepting a bad situation is only partly developed: the job example suggests temporary adjustment for survival, but the reasons for accepting circumstances are not explored in depth. The opposing view is also not clearly distinguished from your own position, and several points about seeking better opportunities are repeated rather than supported with specific explanation. The conclusion restates your opinion but does not fully draw together both views. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits and limits of each approach and support them with a more specific example. The response meets the stated length requirement; nine words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help show the intended structure. However, progression between ideas is not always clear. For example, the second paragraph moves from accepting a temporary job to waiting for a better opportunity without clearly explaining how these points relate. The third paragraph repeats the recommendation to seek better opportunities, so the argument does not develop steadily. Some linking expressions are used mechanically, and the opening sentence’s shift from one view to the other is difficult to follow. Organise the body around one view per paragraph, use clear references to connect examples to claims, and avoid repeating the same recommendation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “shortage of money,” “survival” and “opportunity.” There are also attempts at phrases such as “mental satisfaction” and “open a lot of doors.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to read, including “unsafisfactory,” “accpet,” “veiw points” and “probelms.” Phrases such as “better option” and “new facilities” are vague or unnatural in this context. Aim for more precise expressions and check spelling carefully; for instance, describe a “temporary job” or “financial hardship” rather than relying on repeated references to a “bad situation.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer structures, including conditional ideas such as “when you find better opportunity go for that,” and use simple sentences to make your main opinion understandable. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms occur frequently enough to make reading difficult. For example, “People have their own opinions, either they want to accept…” joins ideas incorrectly, while “it the decision of the mens own” lacks a verb and has faulty agreement. Capitalisation of “while” and “i” is also inconsistent. Practise forming complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and use punctuation to separate independent ideas. More accurate control of basic sentence patterns will make your argument easier to follow.

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