Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is a debate that it is great to agree a worst time as dissapointing work or low income whereas others feel it is good to change this positions. This essay will discuss both the views, followed by my opinion.

To begin with, there are several reasons why to agree with bad situations. The first factors is to get basic items for family or themselves. To clarify, when people have to provide everything for the family, they need to work even in an unsatisfactory work or they don't like the environment. Similarly, the another reason is because they will not get further opportunities. Elaborating further, in developind countries, jobs are find rarely and are limited where people have to accept the situation and work for the company or business even though, they do not go well in the surroundings.

On the other hand, various factors are here to try to improve such positions. Firstly, they can work in their interesting field. To clarify, indivduals will be happy in the workplace and can do better in the surroundings where they are interested and can be themselves without any hesitation. Secondly, it will provide them more opportunities. For instance, If people get to work in their interest and they will work in it, it will provides them more knowlede and facilities and they can work in higher position from their learning of various skills.

In conclusion, it has both advantages and disadvantages of own. Regarding my opinion, As much as I am concerned, I believe, we should improve the situations and work in the field of intreset which will help both business and the person to grow on their own potential.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and gives a clear preference for improving difficult circumstances. The first body paragraph explains why people may stay in unsatisfactory work, especially to provide for their families and because jobs can be scarce; the second presents potential benefits of pursuing an area of interest. These points are relevant, but some are only briefly explained. For example, the claim that changing jobs provides “more opportunities” is followed by a general reference to knowledge and skills, without a specific illustration or fuller explanation of how this leads to improvement. The conclusion restates your position, though it could explain more directly why the benefits of trying to improve outweigh the security of accepting a bad situation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Its progression is easy to follow, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers identify each stage. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, the linking can feel formulaic, with “To clarify” and “Secondly” introducing points in a predictable way rather than showing the precise relationship between ideas. Some references are also unclear, as in “they will not get further opportunities,” where the reason for this is not fully connected to accepting a job. Develop each point in a more explicit sequence and vary how you connect examples and explanations.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “unsatisfactory,” “low income,” “opportunities,” and “potential.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, word-form, and spelling errors make parts of the response awkward or less clear. Examples include “agree a worst time,” “change this positions,” “jobs are find rarely,” and “work in their interesting field.” Spelling errors such as “dissapointing,” “indivduals,” and “knowlede” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn common phrases for this topic, such as “accept a difficult situation,” “seek better employment,” and “job opportunities are scarce,” and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your arguments easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including explanations introduced by “when” and “where.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and verb forms sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The first factors is” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “it will provides them” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “For instance, If people get to work…” also combines clauses awkwardly, and “it has both advantages and disadvantages of own” is not grammatically complete. Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then add subordinate clauses. Check agreement, verb forms, and punctuation, especially when joining clauses with “and” or “where.”

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