Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

On the one hand, people with bad jobs and shortage of money will likely to accept such situations because the availability of the jobs are very low according to their qualifications they usually get there job. If a person is less educated or not meeting the criteria for job occupations they have to accept the situation. Although if someone chooses to leave such job and join other without any other job availability can cause a serious backlash to person's life thus only increase their workload.

On the other hand, people who seriously want to change their lifestyle and overcome their bad job to good job is perfectly fine it a great attitude towards their lifestyle. The feeling to live in low class life is very discomforting when a grown men does not able to fulfill there family's need such as not able to deposit his son's school fees and not able give a good health treatment to his sick mom or dad this such things break men from inside Hence, they finally decide that now they will change their whole life. This makes the person to argue improve such situations. But lack of proper guidance and proper plan of implementation can cause more serious situations to face.

In conclusion, although accepting a bad situation is important if we don't much options but with the availability of jobs if we are not try to improve this make no sense as we experience new things and it also increase of lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both views: the first body paragraph explains why people may stay in an unsatisfactory job, while the second describes reasons to seek change. The examples about school fees and a sick parent make the consequences of low income concrete. However, the discussion is uneven and some reasoning is unclear: the first paragraph focuses mainly on limited job availability, and the second gives more attention to motivation and hardship than to how people can improve their situation. Your own position appears in the conclusion, but “if we are not try to improve this make no sense” is difficult to interpret. State your view clearly in the introduction and develop each side with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps readers identify the two perspectives. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and links between ideas are not always clear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from job availability to qualifications and then to the risk of leaving, without explaining the connection fully. The second paragraph shifts from lifestyle aspirations to family needs and then to lack of guidance. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each supporting point explicitly to the paragraph’s main claim; also make the conclusion’s contrast easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “availability,” “qualifications,” “backlash,” “guidance,” and “implementation.” These choices show an attempt to discuss employment and personal circumstances beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “overcome their bad job to good job,” “low class life,” and “increase of lifestyle.” Repetition of “situation,” “job,” and “person” also makes the response less precise. Build a bank of natural phrases for employment and financial hardship, and check whether each phrase expresses the intended meaning in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional and subordinate clauses, as in “if someone chooses to leave such job…” and “when a grown men does not able…”. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the meaning harder to follow. Examples include “Other argue,” “will likely to accept,” “the availability of the jobs are,” and “if we are not try.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, plurals, and sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate clauses first, then combine them using “because,” “although,” and “if.” Proofread specifically for subject–verb agreement and verb forms, such as “others argue,” “are likely to accept,” and “if we do not try.”

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