Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In an individual lifespan there are lots of ups and downs that he have to face due to this some people think that accepting a bad situation like imperfect work or lack of cash is good although other tend to change these type of situations. why persons have different approches amog these situations are discussed in this essay and also my point of view is depicted in conclusion.

On the one hand, the individuals employed in a sector which they do not like or weather there job is not of their interest and they want to do their own startup but don't have the required capital so they are indirectly forced to work in that field due to this they have to keep patience to run their family errands which leads to discomfort and mental issues. for instance one of family member is working in sales department of a car dealership but he was doing this work only for his parents will. his solely dream was to go abroad and study there.

On the other hand, individuals who have a strong willpower and very determined towards their future goals they always try to improve these situations as they are very aware about todays job market they find themselves a high paying job and indulge them into that due to which they have a good state of mind and a stable future. Furthermore these are the onlys persons who lead the coming generations in a positve a prosperus direction and also become mentor for some youngesters.

In conclusion, i would argue that it is always better to fight for our desires rather than just sitting ideal and killing our dreams for others. Consquently we can have a good amount of money and superfast growing business as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the conclusion: “it is always better to fight for our desires.” The examples of working in an unwanted job and pursuing a different future are relevant. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The first body paragraph describes why someone may remain in an unsatisfactory job, but does not fully explain the case for accepting a bad situation; the family member’s wish to study abroad is mentioned without showing what happened or why acceptance might be sensible. The second paragraph makes broad claims about determined people but gives little specific support. Explain the reasoning behind each view and develop one example for each.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the contrast, and your final paragraph returns to your opinion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the first body paragraph moves from an unwanted job to a startup, family responsibilities, mental health, and a relative’s ambitions without clearly showing how each point supports accepting the situation. Some links, such as “due to this” and “Furthermore,” feel repetitive or do not make the relationship between ideas precise. Use clearer topic sentences and divide explanations and examples into shorter, logically ordered sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “capital,” “mental issues,” “job market,” “determined,” and “stable future.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear. For example, “run their family errands” does not express the likely meaning of supporting a family, while “lead the coming generations in a positive and prosperous direction” is awkward and broad. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “approches,” “positve,” and “prosperus,” which reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for employment, financial pressure, and personal goals, and check spelling and natural word combinations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “although,” “which,” and “as,” but complex sentences are often faulty and errors occur frequently. Examples include “he have to face,” “other tend,” and “these type of situations,” where subject–verb agreement or number is incorrect. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: the opening paragraph begins a new sentence with lowercase “why,” and several body sentences run together through repeated commas and “due to this.” Articles and possessives are also inconsistent, as in “one of family member” and “their job.” These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to understand. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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