Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Today some people accept bad situation due to shortage of job and money . Some people said that shortage of job and money made bad situation for getting these things .

Some people said that the shortage of money and job are on specific time are not make causes for bad situation .This is due to bad economy situation and employment. Some people accept bad situation such as .Firstly some people thought that the bad situation of money or job due to less opportunities and facilities . This situation are made due to carelessness and bad decision . Public want that best facilities and opportunities but they do not want pay taxes .

Secondly , some peoples believe that the shortage of money and job are not permanent ,and we want the accept different ways for solves this problem . We want got knowledge to check how do problem create and how we can solve this . Firstly , people said the bad situation of job and money due causes for taking bad decision and bad steps . The government also should strong steps for solve the problems of employment and shortage of money . The public also should for .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes a limited attempt to address the topic, but it does not clearly explain both views or give a definite personal opinion. It mentions accepting a difficult situation and later suggests that people should find ways to solve problems, yet the distinction between accepting circumstances and trying to improve them remains unclear. The claim that people want facilities but do not want to pay taxes is relevant as a possible explanation, but it is not developed with an example or clear reasoning. The discussion also shifts between jobs, money, government action and personal decisions without establishing how these points answer the question. The response is 49 words below the required minimum, which further limits the opportunity to develop the ideas. State your position directly and support each view with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organisation: the response begins with an introduction, uses “Firstly” and “Secondly” to signal points, and ends by mentioning government action. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several sentences repeat the same references to shortages of money and jobs without clarifying how the ideas connect. For example, “Some people said” is repeated, while “This situation are made” does not clearly refer to a specific cause. The second point also moves from temporary shortages to gaining knowledge and then to government steps, with no clear links between them. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and make each paragraph develop one main idea with clear referencing and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of topic-related words, including “shortage,” “employment,” “opportunities,” “facilities” and “government,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, vocabulary is repetitive, particularly the repeated phrases “shortage of money and job” and “bad situation,” and several combinations are unnatural or unclear, such as “bad economy situation” and “accept different ways for solves this problem.” These choices sometimes make it hard to identify the intended meaning. Build a more precise range for discussing the two positions, such as language for coping with hardship, seeking employment, improving circumstances and economic conditions. Check collocations and use varied but accurate expressions rather than repeating the same broad terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer clauses, including “This is due to bad economy situation and employment” and “we want got knowledge to check how do problem create.” However, control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and errors often make the intended relationships difficult to understand. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “the shortage … are,” verb forms in “we want got” and “for solves,” and incomplete or malformed clauses such as “The public also should for.” Articles and plural forms are also unreliable, as in “accept bad situation” and “some peoples.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, verb patterns after “want” and “should,” and punctuation around sentence boundaries.

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