Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Everyperson in their life always experience worst situation such as they are not able to fullfill their expenses or in their hour of need nobody are willing to help them therefore some time they accept the circumstances. while on the other hand some people cannot hold this situation amd they trying to improve their livelihood and always try to change their era.

I agree with try to correct your era. because if one time you think that i will do and try to improve your worst condition then you can do every thing in your life everything what do you want. For instance, if you passes with any kiind of situation that can hardly handle then you have so many paths at that time like you can accept this worst condition or give up and others are such a like but if you try to handle this situation by bravely then you can make your circumstances easy.

Whilw on the other hand if you are alike a person that accept his worst situation and never try to improve his livelihood.And also he do not know how to earn money and how he can earn his livelihood For instance some people are alike that they fed up from their efforts and they broke then they always lose and they cannot acheive someting big in your life.

In the end i would say both views are good at their own place but according to me that people should try because try try again until you succeed. You can acheive in your life by correcting your circumstances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear personal preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in “I agree with try to correct your era” and the conclusion. You also refer to both views: accepting hardship and making efforts to change it. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The reasons for acceptance are mentioned briefly, while the argument for change relies mainly on general claims such as “you can do every thing in your life” and a broad example about people giving up. The response would be stronger if it explained when acceptance might be sensible—for example, when a situation cannot be changed immediately—and developed a specific, relevant example for each view. Keep your position consistent and make the supporting reasoning more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, discussion of improving circumstances, a contrasting paragraph about acceptance, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “while on the other hand,” “For instance,” and “In the end” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and some links are repetitive or do not accurately signal the relationship between ideas. The second paragraph moves from a general claim to an unclear example, while the third combines several points without clear separation. Improve this by giving each paragraph one main purpose, ordering its explanation and example logically, and using clear sentence boundaries and references so readers can follow who “they” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “circumstances,” “livelihood,” “expenses,” and “succeed,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “worst situation,” “try,” and “improve.” Some word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret, such as “change their era,” “correct your era,” and “they broke.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “fullfill,” “kiind,” “Whilw,” and “acheive.” Build a more precise set of phrases for hardship and change, and check spelling carefully. For example, use “improve their circumstances” rather than “correct their era,” and “overcome a difficult situation” rather than “handle this situation by bravely.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including conditional structures such as “if you try to handle this situation … then you can make your circumstances easy.” However, the range is limited, and attempts to combine clauses are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in “Everyperson … always experience,” “nobody are willing,” and “he do not know”; the conditional example also has “if you passes.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are frequently unclear, as in “livelihood.And also he do not know,” and capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent. These problems sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and divide long ideas into complete sentences before adding more complex structures.

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