Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few individuals think that accepting bad circumstances is exceptional, like unacceptable occupations or deficient amount of wealth.But rest of people take a part in debate it is best to struggle and enhance this kind of circumstances.Nowadays it is very heated debate the we should accept the bad things happening in our lives and live a below average life.But other people consider that we should leave our comfort zone and make the things better.

This paragraph contains information about unpleasant situation of jobs and scarcity of money so, this kind of jobs lack the standards of life.We cannot meet expenses of house furthermore with handsome amount of money we bear all expenses of our life, moreover accepting this phase of unsatisfaction is low amount confidence so we should encourage that phase this tough situation of life.

Second paragraph discuss about the improvement of unpleasant circumstances of daily life and jobs. We should do hardwork for improvement of jobs and get new skill and enhance communication skills in jobs and with consistant jobs and furthermore lifting testis of boss with motivation and make good relationship with wife of boss of company in which we do job.Secondaly, praises the boss management skills and accepting their orders so we want to improve of situation of job we become savings money and invest in other our new bussiness.

To conclusion, we should regularly do job with full spirit and motivation and dedication furthermore, invest time on new project of company in which we employee and servant so we must do struggle for better life standards.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response recognises both sides of the question: the first body paragraph refers to accepting unsatisfactory work and financial difficulty, while the next discusses trying to improve employment and finances. However, the discussion is only partial and the writer’s own position is not clearly stated or consistently explained. The conclusion recommends working hard and investing in a project, but does not directly weigh acceptance against improvement or explain when accepting a situation might be reasonable. Several points are also unclear or insufficiently relevant, such as “lifting testis of boss” and building a relationship with the boss’s wife. Develop each view with a clear reason and a relevant example, then state and support a definite opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly separate the two views. Some linking expressions, including “furthermore,” “moreover” and “Secondaly,” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from job quality to household expenses and confidence without clearly explaining the links. Connectors are often repeated or used where the relationship between ideas is unclear, and references such as “this phase” and “this kind of jobs” are not precise. Use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph, arrange supporting points in a logical order, and use fewer, more accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response attempts vocabulary related to the topic, including “scarcity of money,” “comfort zone,” “communication skills” and “motivation.” These choices show some effort to express ideas beyond very basic language. However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to understand. For example, “exceptional” does not convey that a situation is bad, “deficient amount of wealth” is unnatural, and “lifting testis of boss” appears to be an incorrect phrase. Spelling errors such as “consistant,” “Secondaly” and “bussiness” also reduce accuracy. Prefer common, precise expressions and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, using connectors such as “because,” “furthermore” and “so,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation occur throughout; for example, the opening joins sentences without a space after “wealth,” and several long sentences combine multiple ideas without clear structure. There are also problems with articles, agreement and verb forms, as in “Second paragraph discuss” and “we employee and servant.” These errors can make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas with subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation when editing.

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