Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many individuals argue that, the best option to deal witha bad situation, like not getitng your dream job or money shortage, or to deal with that kind of situation and try to tackle them. Both views have their marits and demerits but. I completely support the view to deal with it. This essay will discuss both views.
On the one hand which i support because some bad situation make us abel to deal any kind of harshe situation like job lossing as result if we applyed it on overselfs we can get any anxity or depression moreover easy we handel it. For instance when i was in covid time i lost my job and i have nothing to do with it so, after that i deal with this harsh time and after ownward i got selected in police departmet which are not quite good and same as my profession so i continue that job.
Furthermore, the other view just to accept bad situation it help us to be more energytic to just face hard situation and make us stay calm in bad situation money loss or job, Furthermore some time doing nothing just faced the reality the god should have best thought for you and make you get rewarded. For example, in my college time i don't have money to pay the tution fee so my head of department dont allow me due to fee issue in that time i have no money to pay for ma acadmic course but i accept that .
In conclustion, individuals should handel or agree with any kind of situation, but my view which i agree is to deal with it and solve it which are good to improve bad situation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You address both views and state a preference for trying to improve a bad situation, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The personal examples about losing a job during COVID and being unable to pay college fees are relevant, but they do not consistently explain how they support the two positions. The discussion of acceptance is particularly unclear: the claim that it can help people “stay calm” is relevant, while the idea that “god should have best thought for you” is not developed into a clear reason. Your position also shifts between “deal with it,” “accept,” and “solve it,” leaving the distinction between the views uncertain. Explain each view separately and connect each example directly to a reason.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the one hand,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow. The first body paragraph begins with an unclear sentence, then moves from coping with hardship to a job example without a clear link. In the second, “Furthermore” is repeated and the discussion of acceptance shifts abruptly from staying calm to religious belief and then to college fees. Some references, such as “it” and “that,” are not clear. Use one main idea per paragraph, order its explanation and example logically, and use linking phrases only where they show a genuine relationship.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “bad situation,” “shortage,” “depression,” “reality” and “improve,” and the examples make your meaning partly understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make the reader work to interpret the message. For example, “job lossing,” “energetic” in the sense of becoming more resilient, and “deal with any kind of harsh situation” are not natural or precise expressions. Spelling errors such as “marits,” “anxity” and “departmet” also reduce clarity. Build a more accurate set of phrases for coping, accepting circumstances and taking action, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt to use both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “when” and “so.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence construction, tense, agreement and punctuation can make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “some bad situation make us able to deal” has problems with plural agreement and sentence structure, while “when i was in covid time i lost my job” needs clearer clause construction and punctuation. The opening sentence also contains an incomplete or confused structure. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurate subordinate clauses. Check verb forms, subject–verb agreement, capitalisation and punctuation during revision.
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