Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Most of the poeples beleive that it is good to accept a bad time,such as small job or having low money .Other argue that is is good to try and enhance better situation. This essay agrees that the people who argue that it is better to try and improve such situations are important for those people who have some knowledge and future goals . On the other side people who had no other option are usually accept these situations.

The people who argue that it is better to try and improve such situations are important for those people who have some knowledge and future goals . Knowlege and their expectations are also very high and one main this thing confidence on it self for the betterment and to obtain there future goals. One of my friend who started their job initially as as assistant sub enginner in 2018 with just twenty thousand salary and he had a goals to become a quantity surveyor in future .He worked day as a sub engineer and when he was free he practiced on his goals with there seniors and now he become a qunatity surveyor in well known construction company and earned two lac monthly.

Some peple accept this bad situation these are those people who can do nothing in his life and can be happy on a very small things and on very small income because they don't have any future goals and responsibilties these are usually unmarried people. One of my class fellow started job after their graduation is done just thirty thousand and he spend these amount in his hostel expenses.

Most of the poeples beleive that it is good to accept a bad time,such as small job or having low money .Other argue that is is good to try and enhance better situation. This essay agrees that the people who argue that it is better to try and improve such situations are important for those people who have some knowledge and future goals . On the other side people who had no other option are usually accept these situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a relevant opinion: you favour trying to improve a difficult situation for people with knowledge and goals, while suggesting that others may accept it when they have few options. The two personal examples—a friend progressing from an assistant engineer to a quantity surveyor and a classmate spending a modest salary on hostel costs—help illustrate these views. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons for accepting a bad situation are briefly asserted, and the essay does not explain when acceptance might be sensible or how people with limited options could respond. Your position is also qualified rather than consistently developed, and the repeated opening paragraph adds no further argument. Develop both sides more evenly and make the conclusion follow from the discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, a paragraph supporting improvement, a paragraph about acceptance, and a repeated opening at the end. The examples are placed near the ideas they illustrate, which gives the reader some guidance. However, progression is weak because the final paragraph repeats the introduction instead of summarising the argument or concluding. Connections between claims are often unclear; for example, the link between having no goals and accepting a low income is asserted rather than explained. Some linking phrases, such as “On the other side,” signal contrast, but the overall organisation remains repetitive and the references to “these people” are not always precise. Use distinct paragraphs for each view and a brief conclusion that synthesises your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “future goals,” “salary,” “responsibilities,” and “betterment,” and the examples make the intended meaning generally recoverable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “small job,” “low money,” “enhance better situation,” and “happy on a very small things.” Repetition of “people,” “goals,” and “situation” also restricts precision. Spelling errors such as “poeples,” “beleive,” “Knowlege,” and “qunatity” are noticeable and can slow the reader. Build a more accurate set of collocations for employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and word forms carefully. This would make your ideas clearer without changing their meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer structures, including “This essay agrees that…” and the sentence describing your friend’s career progression, so the response is not limited entirely to short statements. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns. For example, “Other argue that is is good” has problems with subject–verb agreement and clause construction, while “people who had no other option are usually accept” combines verb forms incorrectly. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a very small things,” and punctuation is often missing or misplaced, particularly around sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with clear subordinate clauses; check agreement, tense consistency, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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