Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The majority argue that to accept the failure such as to continue living in poor life cycle or continue the unsatisfactory job while the others think that it is better to try and enhance your self in such situations. According to my perspective, keep going to upgrade your self and enhance your status and abilities.

On the first hand, the many individuals think that don't moving forward accept the bad situation and happy with the shortage of money. It will be helpful in some stages it reduce the anxiety or pressure of life. For instance, the person how doesn't have the potential for achieving their goals they don't need to do the hard work and relax in their life but they also have many kind of problems such as in this present time they don't buy necessary things. So, this is the big problems that are faced by the person how stopped their progress and stayed in the place where there he has a chance to develop their selves.

On the other hand, the individuals argue that it is the essential thing to improve your self for achieving your goals. It is the best way to get your dreams and complete your goals. For example, imagine the two persons one is enthusiastic for their dreams and he have a dream to increase their abilities and the another one is don't try to do their best. So, the first one will achieve their life style what they want or what they like.

To conclude, the both arguments are write according the people thinking. But the person how try to do some thing they will achieve it on day.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve one’s circumstances, particularly in the opening and conclusion. The first body paragraph also gives a relevant reason for accepting a difficult situation—reducing anxiety—and recognises the cost of remaining in poverty. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the example about someone lacking the potential to achieve goals is unclear, and the second view is supported mainly by a hypothetical comparison rather than a specific explanation of how effort can improve a job or financial situation. Your position is present, but the conclusion’s claim that people who try will succeed “one day” is too absolute. Explain the limits and benefits of each view and support your opinion with clearer, more realistic examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the first hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers identify the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. In the first body paragraph, the ideas about avoiding hard work, feeling relaxed, and being unable to buy necessities are connected, but the relationship between them is not clearly explained. References such as “they,” “their,” and “the person” also make it hard to identify who is being discussed. Use clearer topic sentences and link each example explicitly to the paragraph’s main point; vary linking expressions rather than relying mainly on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “shortage of money,” “anxiety,” “achieving their goals,” and “abilities.” This gives you enough language to communicate the general subject and both viewpoints. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to understand. Examples include “poor life cycle,” “enhance your self,” “the big problems,” and “the arguments are write.” Repetition of “goals,” “dreams,” and “improve” also limits precision. Aim to learn common word partnerships and use them accurately, such as “financial hardship,” “develop skills,” and “make progress.” Check spelling and word forms, and choose vocabulary that expresses the intended meaning directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “For instance” and a comparison using “So.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, so readers sometimes have to work to understand the intended meaning. For example, “the many individuals think that don't moving forward accept the bad situation” has problems with clause structure and verb forms, while “he have a dream” shows subject–verb disagreement. There are also recurring issues with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “this is the big problems.” Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and verb patterns. Shorter, correctly punctuated sentences would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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