Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believed that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. According to first point of view in bad situation, people accepted unsatisfactory job and shortage of money because they need to support thier families and manage their conditions in this crisis. secondly, it is better to try and improve such situations because satisfactory job is better for or mental health and money has aslo vital role in our life.

Firstly in the bad situation, people accepted low budget or boring jobs for support thier family and survive in this environment. As we know, the present time is very competitive and challenging for everyone so it is very difficult task to survive in era. In addition, people had more responsiblities of their families. For example, it is very difficult to complete the expanses of the childrens and our parents. So many of the people start those low budget jobs for survival .

On the other hand, some people argue that it is better to improve such situations because interesting job had great importance on our mental health. Everyone who loved their work should preform it with full concentration and complete their work with full interest and punctually. Futhermore, it is very impotant to had interest in work for more refreshing experience of life. For example , the people who satisfied with work or sallery were spending life more happily then those who unsatisfeid in jobs and shoratge of money.

In conclusion, both of the veiws have different impacts on various people and their life styles. But in my opinion, i also prefer second situation because for my good mental health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both views and give a clear preference for trying to improve a situation, especially in the conclusion: “I also prefer [the] second situation.” The examples about supporting family members and the effect of satisfying work on mental health are relevant. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the reasons for accepting a poor job are stated, but the essay does not explore when acceptance might be sensible or how people could improve their circumstances. Your opinion also appears only at the end, so its reasoning is not fully established. To strengthen the response, explain each view with a specific example and make your position clear earlier. The response meets the required length; 39 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a recognisable overall structure: an opening, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “Firstly,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and some linking is mechanical. For example, the opening repeats the task before moving abruptly into reasons, while the first body paragraph shifts from competition to family expenses without clearly showing how these points connect. References such as “second situation” are also imprecise. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it in sequence; use linking phrases only where they express a genuine relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “mental health,” “responsibilities,” “competitive,” and “survive,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make expression imprecise, such as “low budget jobs,” “complete the expanses,” “sallery,” and “refreshing experience of life.” Repetition of “situation,” “job,” and “people” also restricts flexibility. Build a more accurate set of phrases for employment and financial hardship, and check spelling carefully. Prefer natural combinations such as “low-paid work,” “cover expenses,” and “job satisfaction”; these will make your ideas clearer without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a reason clause in “because they need to support their families” and a relative clause in “Everyone who loved their work.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “interesting job had great importance” needs an article and a more suitable verb form, while “it is very impotant to had interest” has an incorrect verb pattern. Tense also shifts between “believed,” “argue,” and “accepted” without a clear reason. Practise accurate present-tense statements and patterns such as “it is important to have an interest,” then proofread each sentence for a complete, correctly formed structure.

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