Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowdays some peole believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations
On the first hand some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfy job or shortage of money they beleive that when bad time or any bad siuation come to any person and they suffer from them so this bad time or bad situation help them to be strong like in this situation most of the people accept defeat but from my opinion i think it is the day or situation who helps u to grop up like u loose everyday to win one day for example david gppgins who was face most of this situation and become most successfull his most famous dialog stay hard in every situation. so most of the people nowdays follow them.
ON the other hand some people it is better to try and improve such situation and i also agree from this mindset every person who suffer from bad time or situations they also havr to try and improve such situations such as middle class parents should help their children to understand the situation and try to do hard work as well as learn some basic skills which help them in bad situation to earn money
In conclusion i honestly accepting difficult situation helps them to finish their fear or also they should try to find their potential and do work on self which help them to take better lifestyle
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You address both views and give a personal position: you explain that hardship may build strength, then say people should also try to improve their circumstances. However, the discussion is only partial and the ideas are under-developed. The example of David Goggins is named, but the link between his experience and accepting a bad situation is not clearly explained; the point about parents teaching children skills is also brief. Your conclusion combines acceptance and self-improvement, but does not clearly resolve which approach you consider better. The response is 213 words, so it is 37 words below the 250-word minimum; the 54 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific, explained example.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting the opposing views, and a conclusion. The transitions “On the first hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long, loosely connected sentences, especially in the first body paragraph. Some links are repetitive, and references such as “this situation” and “them” do not always make clear what they refer to. The opening also repeats much of the task wording rather than establishing a focused direction. Use shorter, clearly organised sentences and make each paragraph develop one main point in a logical sequence.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “accept a bad situation,” “improve,” “potential,” and “lifestyle,” and you attempt more specific language through the example of David Goggins. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “bad situation” and “try and improve.” Frequent spelling errors, including “Nowdays,” “peole,” and “successfull,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of word choice. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “finish their fear” and “do work on self.” Build a wider set of accurate expressions for hardship, resilience, and financial or career improvement, and check spelling carefully before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt to express connected and complex ideas, for example by using “when” and “such as” to introduce explanations and examples. However, many sentences are difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear punctuation or complete grammatical structure. In “some people believe … they beleive that,” the repeated clause is not properly separated, while “every person who suffer … they also havr to try” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Verb forms and tense are also inconsistent, as in “bad situation come” and “who was face.” Capitalisation and punctuation are unreliable, particularly in the long first body paragraph. Practise writing shorter complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.
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