Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, while others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Overal, every argument has two sides. I will try to reinforce my idea that it is better to improve such situations and tell apropriate reasons and arguments.

To begin with, every person should have goals in their life and chase their dreams besides the situations they are. The path of your dreams are not always effortless. Failure can serve as a stepping stone towards personal growth and future success. Unsatisfactory jobs, unconvenient job environment and shortgage money sometimes are reason of dissapointment and willing of accept your fate. However, this reasons make people more lazier to not chase their dreams and stay there where they are.

On the other hand, shortgage of money does not always mean unsatisfactory jobs. Sometimes it is start of new opportunities in their carrieral path. For example, not every doctor starts with a high salary, they are first nurse helper, than nurse, then junior doctors and finally they became a succesful doctors. From my perspective, every person should experience their carrieral path to be more thankfull of their choice. The more simply their path will be, the more effortles they try to be succesful, which means the lack of inteligent and knowledge of their profession.

Nevertheless, failure is accaptable if person try to learn from this and try to build more convenient path for her dreams .The head of full fears does not hve space to dream.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear preference for improving difficult circumstances, and you include relevant ideas about pursuing goals and learning from setbacks. The example of doctors progressing through different roles also attempts to support your view. However, the discussion of accepting a bad situation is not developed as a distinct, balanced viewpoint; the essay mainly argues for persistence, and some claims—such as that an easier path means less intelligence or knowledge—are unclear. Your conclusion is brief and does not fully bring the two views together. The response is 240 words, so it is 10 words below the required minimum; 27 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop both sides with clear reasons and a more directly relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding statement, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “Nevertheless” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not consistently develop separate, clearly defined views. For example, the paragraph beginning “On the other hand” shifts from money to career progression and then to gratitude, without making the links explicit. Some references, including “this reasons” and “their choice,” are unclear, while the final sentence about a “head of full fears” is not connected clearly to the preceding point. Organise each paragraph around one main idea and use linking phrases only where the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “stepping stone,” “personal growth,” “future success,” and “opportunities,” which helps communicate your general message. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “shortgage,” “dissapointment,” “carrieral path,” and “more lazier”; phrases such as “willing of accept your fate” and “head of full fears” are also unnatural or unclear. These issues sometimes obscure your intended meaning, particularly in the conclusion. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common word partnerships, such as “career path,” “financial difficulties,” and “accept one’s circumstances,” before attempting more elaborate expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea (“Failure can serve as a stepping stone…”) and a comparative construction (“The more simply their path will be…”). However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms. For example, “every person should have goals … and chase” does not maintain a clear grammatical pattern, while “this reasons make” has a demonstrative–noun agreement error. In “not every doctor starts … they are first nurse helper,” the relationship between clauses and the article use are problematic. The final sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise accurate sentence patterns first, then combine ideas using controlled subordinate clauses and check agreement and articles.

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