Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Unsatisfactory job and shortage of money are those bad factors and face of life every person should have face. The best way to go through them is to face them, improve yourself and accept the reality you are facing. Many people may have same issues in their life most of them imporove their selves while on the other hand other just get to it make it a burden on them selves.

Overall, I partially agree with that it is best to accept the situation and with also this that we have to face it and improve them in oue lives.

Initially, it is not a best decision to accept it. If it is a worse situation you should face it and improve your self. It will also improve your experience. Lide has two faces good and bad. Bad one includes shortage of money or unsatisfactory job. We should face them and make it correct. Mostly, people just cry and say it's our fate.

I argued that instead of accepting bad situations firstly, we should analyis the situation. If we understood it then solve and and make the solution but, if we do not just accept is and move on.

On the other hand, all the situations and parts of life should be analyised and then we will took sight on it. If the situation is understandable then them accoeding to my perspective we should enhance our skills and our experience. Opinion places a huge impact on the situation and think with your whole knowledge and mind.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both broad views—accepting difficult circumstances and trying to improve them—and state a partial position: “we have to face it and improve” while also accepting reality. However, the discussion remains limited and the position is not consistently clear. Most of the response repeats that people should face, analyse, or improve a situation, without explaining when acceptance might be sensible or giving a developed example. The point that people “just cry and say it’s our fate” is relevant but is not explored, and the final paragraph does not clearly resolve the two views. To strengthen the response, explain each side separately, give a specific example such as an employee seeking training or accepting a temporary setback, and state clearly how your opinion balances acceptance with action.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some paragraphing, and expressions such as “Initially” and “On the other hand” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the opening and second paragraph both state a similar position, while later paragraphs repeat the need to analyse or improve circumstances without building a clear comparison of the two views. Some links are inaccurate or unclear, as in “if we do not just accept is and move on,” and “On the other hand” introduces ideas that do not clearly contrast with the previous paragraph. Pronouns such as “them” and “it” also make references uncertain. Plan one paragraph for each view, followed by a clear opinion, and use linking phrases only when their relationship between ideas is precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the general topic, with relevant terms such as “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “fate,” and “enhance our skills.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are awkward or imprecise, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to follow. For example, “bad factors and face of life” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “make it a burden on them selves” is unclear. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “imporove,” “analyis,” and “analyised.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise phrases such as “difficult circumstances,” “accept the situation,” and “take practical steps to improve it” would help express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If it is a worse situation you should face it” and “if we understood it then solve.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and articles frequently make the message difficult to interpret. For instance, “every person should have face” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “then we will took sight on it” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence beginning “If we understood it” also lacks a grammatically complete main clause. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense consistency, articles, and agreement. Shorter, accurate sentences would make your reasoning easier to understand.

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