Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, it is much difficult to work in unhealthy job or running life with small money. There are some opinion of people which argue that we should accept these situation and some argue that we should improve our life.

Let's begin looking the argue of second one who want to improve their situation,there are pros and cons of this side of opinion because unsatisfactory job can demage the productivity of the men that's why we should work hard and improve their life style. Moreover, when are doing work at bad situation we can earn less amount this thing also inhance stress in our life. In this way our mental ability reduce the reason is that, the working situation is unhealthy and we can earn not enough amount thats why its bad for our health.

Another argument is that, our society don't like those people who can earn small amount. They don't respect them thats why earn much amount is compulsory for society as well as our family also.In my point of view, we should work hard change our current situation to build good repute on society

Turning to the other side of argument, whenever we are trying to change our situation if unfortunatilly we can't succeded it can impact on our situation which is already bad and people critise it. So we work hard to change the situation which mandatiory thing for our life.

All things considered, changing the bad situation we should make good plan and after that focus on goal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic and state a preference for improving a difficult situation, especially in “we should work hard [to] change our current situation.” You also mention a possible risk of trying to change things: failure could make an already bad situation worse. However, the discussion is unbalanced and only partly answers the task. The case for accepting a bad situation is not clearly explained; the paragraph introduced as “the other side” mainly returns to the need to work hard and change things. Several claims, such as society not respecting people who earn little, are asserted without a relevant example or explanation. Develop both views distinctly, then give a clear, consistent opinion supported by a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs and to guide the reader with phrases such as “Let's begin” and “Turning to the other side of argument.” The overall progression is nevertheless difficult to follow: the paragraph labelled as the other side does not develop acceptance, and the discussion repeatedly returns to improving the situation. Connections between ideas are sometimes unclear, particularly in the long opening argument linking job conditions, income, stress and health. Some linking phrases are also mechanical or inaccurately used, and references such as “this thing” do not identify the point precisely. Give each viewpoint its own focused paragraph, use clear topic sentences, and connect each reason to its consequence with more precise referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “unsatisfactory job,” “productivity,” “stress,” “mental ability” and “current situation,” so the reader can generally identify the subject of the essay. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less clear. For example, “unhealthy job” and “small money” are not natural ways to describe poor working conditions and low income, while “build good repute on society” is difficult to interpret. Spelling errors such as “demage,” “inhance” and “unfortunatilly” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for employment, financial hardship and social consequences, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure in “unsatisfactory job can demage the productivity … that's why we should work hard.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb forms and sentence construction can make the argument hard to follow. Examples include “There are some opinion,” “when are doing work,” and “we can't succeded it can impact,” where the grammatical relationships are unclear. Punctuation and spacing around commas and full stops also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected subordinate clause, then check subject–verb agreement, articles and verb forms before adding further ideas.

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