Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is commonly thought to accept unbeliveable job or accept a bad condition in life is a best way. In other hand some people belive it isbetter to work hard and polish ourselve.

Every person have a secuss in thier live but at the time it have a down fall in one time in life. Many people who are going a great with thier goals and dreams but suddently a bad situation enter in thier lives and that person is very confused in that movement. He did not decided what should i do but unfortunately he accpet thier bad situation.

In other hand most people belived that if you are stuck in that type of situation you should not to be accept that, you must be try again and work on your weak area and improve yourselve. I belive this is a right way we never accpet our dawn fall we must be try again and again.

If a person accept thier down fall or other bad situation like shortage of money, unsatisfactory job or unbeliveable acchivement i think that person can not be move in thier live it can be demotivated and a demotivated person can not move in their live and cant not improve their weak area. We must me make sure we are motivated in any situation and do not disappinted in anywhere.

In conclusion, most people accpet thier dawn fall they do nothing with that. If we are facing a difficult situation we must be hold active and improve ourselve.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear preference for trying to improve a difficult situation, especially in “we never accept our downfall; we must try again and again.” You also mention both views and include examples such as an unsatisfactory job and a shortage of money. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons someone might accept a bad situation are not explained, and the response mostly repeats that people should stay motivated and keep trying. The opening position is also difficult to identify because it describes the views unclearly. To strengthen the response, explain why acceptance may sometimes be sensible—for example, when change is not immediately possible—then develop your own view with a specific example and a clearer conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, discussion, supporting paragraph and conclusion, and the reader can generally follow your preference for perseverance. However, progression between ideas is limited: several paragraphs repeat the same point about accepting a “downfall” and trying again, rather than developing distinct reasons for each view. Linking phrases such as “In other hand” are repeated and do not always show the relationship between ideas accurately. Some references are also unclear, as in “that person” and “that type of situation,” where the reader has to infer what is meant. Give each body paragraph a distinct purpose, use transitions such as “By contrast” or “For example” appropriately, and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “goals and dreams,” and “motivated.” These choices show that you can communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make meaning harder to follow, including “unbeliveable job,” “polish ourselve,” “dawn fall,” and “unbeliveable acchivement.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “a bad situation enter in their lives” and “hold active.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than repeating “bad situation” and “downfall.” Learning topic phrases such as “improve one’s circumstances” and “make ends meet” would help you express the ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall message is usually understandable. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns, agreement, verb forms and articles. For example, “Every person have a secuss” needs a singular verb, while “you should not to be accept that” has an incorrect verb construction. In “He did not decided what should i do,” the verb form and embedded question structure are faulty. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention, particularly where several ideas run together. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “although” and “because.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms during proofreading.

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