Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is a growing argument whereas individuals should accept situations like unsatisfactory job or shortage of money or they should take steps to make this conditionds better. Although adjustment is sometimes appreciatable, I firmly believe that people should always work hard to do better in life.

On the one hand, too much dissatisfaction in life, makes people frustrated. It is harmful because it creates anxiety and depression. When a person learns how to how to accept destiny, he stops complaining. As a result, in the long run, his frustrations for life decreases. He may find happiness in whatever he has.For instance, if a person learns how to cope up in a unsatisfactory job, he will have less things to be bothered in the future.

On the otherhand, without trying , nobody can make their situation better. There is a saying that "No pain, no gain". So one should work hard, take all the pains to take their life in a good condition. Without trying ,life will be always the same. It is the hardwork which makes impossible possible. For example, if I have accepted my destiny, I could have never completed m

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve one’s circumstances: “I firmly believe that people should always work hard to do better in life.” The first body paragraph gives a relevant reason for acceptance, linking it to reduced frustration, while the second argues that effort can change a person’s situation. However, the discussion is only partial: the ideas are asserted rather than sufficiently explained, and the personal example begins (“if I have accepted my destiny…”) but is cut off before it supports your point. The response also does not meet the required minimum length, so there is limited space to develop both sides and give a complete example. Extend each argument with specific explanation and finish with a clear conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and linking phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “For instance.” This helps the reader follow the basic contrast. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several links feel mechanical rather than showing how one idea leads to the next. The final example is unfinished, so the response stops without a conclusion or a complete summary of your position. There are also small cohesion problems, such as the abrupt movement from accepting destiny to finding happiness. Develop each paragraph through a clear sequence—claim, explanation, and example—and add a concluding paragraph to complete the overall progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “dissatisfaction,” “frustrated,” “anxiety,” “depression,” and “cope.” These choices make the general meaning understandable and show an attempt to discuss emotional and practical consequences. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “appreciatable,” “cope up in,” “take their life in a good condition,” and “frustrations for life.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “conditionds,” “otherhand,” and “hardwork,” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of expressions for employment, financial hardship, and taking action, and check collocations and spelling during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a concessive opening with “Although” and a conditional example beginning “if a person learns…”. These attempts show some range, and the main ideas can generally be understood. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in longer structures. Examples include “an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money,” where articles are needed, “his frustrations for life decreases,” where agreement and phrasing are faulty, and “if a person learns how to how to accept destiny,” which repeats a clause. Punctuation and spacing are also uneven, as in “has.For instance” and “trying ,life.” Practise checking articles, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries, and proofread each sentence for repeated or missing words.

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