Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is often argued that , whether people should stay satisfied with limited money ,or whether they should hard work to improve their situation. In this eassy I will discuss both perspective and tell why I believe that everybody should try their best for a better life.

On one hand,there are many reasons for why people choose to stay in a unsstisfactory job with low money. Firstly, the lack of better educational qualification. They might not change their work due to lack of proper degree. For instance, a high school student will never be able to apply for a high salary job that is required a university degree. So, it is quite impossible for him to find a better job. Secondly, People often prefer job security rather than having a good salary or better environment. They tend to stay in their familliar company where their job is more secured.They don't like to take any risk.

On the other hand, enough money means having a higher standard of life. In our society money decides most of our things such as social value, respect and better standard life. If anybody i want to have a taste of a better lifestyle, he must need to have money. Not only that , a appluant amount of money can help a person to survive any kinds of difficulties such as major medical issue or sudden unemployment. Job satisfaction is also important for a comfortable lifestyle. A flexible and satisfied working environment provides mental satisfactory which evey person desire.

Finally, from my perspective I believe everybody deserve a life where they can fulfill their all desires and for that everybody need to do their best regardless the situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve one’s circumstances, particularly in the introduction and conclusion. The discussion of accepting a difficult situation is supported with relevant reasons: limited qualifications and the security of a familiar job. However, the second view is less directly developed. The paragraph mainly explains why money and job satisfaction matter, rather than showing why people should actively try to improve their situation or how they might do so. Some claims, such as money determining social respect, are broad and would benefit from a specific example or qualification. To strengthen the response, explain the practical benefits and possible costs of taking steps to improve, then support your opinion with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding opinion. Signposting such as “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “Finally” helps readers follow the progression, and the first main paragraph develops two distinct reasons. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some flexibility in linking ideas. However, connections within the second main paragraph are less clear: the move from social status to financial security and then job satisfaction feels like a list rather than a fully connected argument. Some linking is also mechanical, and references such as “for that” in the conclusion are vague. Use topic sentences that directly frame each view and add clearer explanations linking each supporting point to the main argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “job security,” “standard of life,” “flexible,” and “unemployment.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “proper degree” and “major medical issue.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “eassy,” “unsstisfactory,” “familliar,” and “appluant” appear in the response. Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “hard work to improve,” “a good salary or better environment,” and “mental satisfactory.” Aim to learn common collocations as complete phrases and proofread spelling carefully. More precise wording would help you express the contrast between accepting circumstances and taking action to change them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “If anybody i want to have a taste of a better lifestyle, he must need to have money” and a relative clause in “a high salary job that is required a university degree.” These attempts show some range, but several sentences contain grammatical errors that make the meaning less smooth. For example, “a high salary job that is required a university degree” has an incorrect clause construction, while “everybody deserve” and “everybody need” have subject–verb agreement errors. Articles and sentence punctuation also need attention, as in “stay in a unsstisfactory job” and the inconsistent spacing around commas. Practise accurate conditional and relative-clause patterns, and check agreement and articles during revision.

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