Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

I often wonder, how fate is designed for each individual and how meticulously it is crafted by the creator. There are times when people get stuck in situations which are not escapable and also situations which give us a purpose to live.

In this modern era, we usually are bombarded with options regarding our job, education, partner etc. Sometimes when a hurdle arises for instance, you are not particularly enjoying your work yet you are being forced to stick to it because there are bills to pay, you have familial responsibilities to fulfill and less opportunities or skill-set to get into other jobs. In these specfici situations, it is better to accept the situation as it is rather than trying to get out of it. Not everybody can do their prefered job and earn in bulk. Often times people even resort to low payment but a good office environemnt so that there is sustainability.

Futhermore, when employers find out that you have no place to go to, they intend to treat you poorly than before and the same thing occurs when a person is a relationship. If he/she has very limited options, it is more likely that they will face ill treatment from their partner and cannot get out of the relationship regardless of the pain inflicted upon them. There was time when I badly needed a job as a student and ended up securing one which was mentally exhausting me in every way possibe. I had to work over time and still get treated poorly, consequently, I couldn't quit the job because I had my semester fees to pay. So I had to adapt to the environment and continue working there till I finished my undergrad.

There are desitute people out there who are working really hard, burning the midnight oil to improve their cicumstance. A case in point is a rickshawpuller's son who is studying day and night to secure a good job and give a better lifestyle to his family. I appreciate how hard he is trying because I believe that nothing is impossible and people should not settles for anything less than what they deserve.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both accepting difficult circumstances and trying to improve them, and your own view is clearest in the final paragraph: you admire people who work to create a better life. The personal account of staying in an exhausting job to pay semester fees is relevant support for acceptance, while the rickshaw-puller’s son illustrates ambition. However, the discussion is uneven: acceptance receives two paragraphs and a detailed example, whereas the case for improving circumstances is brief and its example is not fully explained. The opening reflections on fate also do not establish your position clearly. To strengthen the response, state your view directly in the introduction and develop both sides with comparable reasoning, explaining when acceptance is practical and why effort can lead to change.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure, moving from an introduction to reasons for accepting hardship, a personal example, and finally an argument for improvement. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and connectors such as “Furthermore” and “consequently” show relationships between ideas. However, progression is not consistently clear: the second body paragraph shifts from workplace treatment to relationships and then to your own job experience, making its central focus less precise. The final paragraph introduces the opposing view abruptly, without a clear transition or a developed comparison with the earlier discussion. Some linking is also mechanical. Organise the essay into one paragraph for each view, followed by a clear conclusion, and use references and transitions that make the relationship between examples and claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including phrases such as “familial responsibilities,” “mentally exhausting,” “sustainability,” and “burning the midnight oil.” These choices help convey personal and social pressures, and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, several spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural expressions, including “specfici,” “environemnt,” “desitute,” and “improve their cicumstance.” Some collocations are also awkward, such as “earn in bulk,” “low payment,” and “settles for anything less.” These inaccuracies limit the precision of the vocabulary, even though they rarely prevent understanding. Proofread spelling carefully and choose more natural topic-specific phrases, for example “earn a high income,” “low-paid work,” and “improve their circumstances.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional clauses (“when a hurdle arises”) and a relative clause (“which was mentally exhausting me”). Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in longer sentences and punctuation. For example, “I often wonder, how fate is designed” uses an unnecessary comma, while “people should not settles” has incorrect verb agreement after “should.” In “There was time,” an article is missing, and the sentence beginning “Sometimes when a hurdle arises” shifts from general discussion to “you” without a clear grammatical or rhetorical reason. Some sentences also join several clauses with commas, reducing control. Review articles, verb forms after modal verbs, and sentence boundaries; clearer clause structure would make your complex ideas easier to follow.

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